silent movie

silent movie

lip reading your soft parchment

i run my fingers along your edges

typeset imprints like tiny freckles

cover your page with my adoration

we are poems in transition

revisions eternal

never an end punctuation

just more perusal

of what's in our hearts

we are theme

we are dream

we ride in the carriage

of an old Underwood 

stressed and unstressed vowels

who made a vow

to write upon each other's 

stationery core

the stationary love

we memorize with rote reasoning

even when we know our hearts' script

can be remembered 

without words.

8/12/18

Reviews

[steppenwolf]

"...riding in the carriage of an old Underwood" Oh wow. If you think I'm being over-the-top at 8:15 in the AM...well, sorry but this is one of your best. Again, you used the theme I really like that I mentioned before. Turning words inside out, looking at them in a mirror...
Thank you for posting this...gives me hope...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Leslie...:)))

j.

[Carolynn]

the freedom to write whatever is on our hearts really does translate into such a romantic encounter that you just took us on with this :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Carolynn.
j.

[barleygirl]

Definitely a poem after a writer's heart. Delightful wordplay with writing ideas & implements almost forgotten. Love the affectionate overtones of invitation (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Margie.
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Jacob, I have an old black Underwood sitting on my desk to remind me what writing should be. This poem is a wonderful mime, the sense of touch prevailing and enriching the perfect metaphor. Dramatic spacing and cadence. The third verse really resonated with me. The words we write even when “ we know our hearts’ script can be remembered without words.”...Amazing, I applaud you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Annette,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

damn! one of your finest jacob! i feel complete in your closing ... such a tribute to language, love and poetic perfect imperfection as the song says ;) really enjoyed reading ... glad it did not slip past me ..the soft parchment, fingers along the edges ... the freckles ...your title .. fine stuff says i!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, E.
j.

[Fran Marie]

No words needed the heart always holds the silent love it feels..great poetry here Jacob..much enjoyed

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fran Marie..so nice to see you again.

j.

[Judy Emery/ Lilly Emery]

I really liked reading your poem, I can see my own self reading a book, seeing how it brings the move to my own mind of images, that play's out in the seen. Thank you so much for sharing your work. I do hope you visit my page I would really like if you could read some of my work. thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words Lilly, and i will make a visit to your page as soon as time allows.

j.

[redzone]

when I first started to write, I used my mom's old typewriter.... the clack clacking of the round faced keys made a music that helped me with meter and rhyme.... I still have her typewriter and occasionally get it out to ink up a sheet of paper.... the bell sound as the carriage reached the end of a line reminds me that there is a special love found in the union of ink, words and paper....

when you mention that your "style" (for lack of a better word) of no punctuation in this and many other of your poems reminds me of e.e.cummings in many ways, but also in how he found love in poetry, as did you Jacob....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Curt.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Absolutely one of the best poems I have read of yours love this so much Jacob hope you are well and happy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the kind words Julie.
j.

[Neville]

You just keep raising the bar jacob.... Bravo my fine literary friend .... N

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Neville.
j.

[Neville]

pleasure and true.. N