clarity is the genius of existence

clarity is the genius of existence

 

 

and the years in serpentine appearance

muddled retrospect,

once the clarity of longevity of love

 

now ashes lie next to each other

in urns turned towards the sunsets

and nature's whispers bow to the memory

of old flames once shooting stars

in pristine sky of youth

then raising youth

then being razed by the very hand that made them

 

unmade bodies

years spent bound hand in hand

then minds floating away together

love never really dies

because souls always have forever

 

in which to dance.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/5/18

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

Those last few lines send this piece soaring.
Refreshingly, stark imagery and a few harsh-but-true references along the way do not result in ultimate cynicism.
Cannot help but view "Clarity..." with great affection. Eloquently and elegantly, Jacob, you've dispensed spiritual reassurance!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Jimmy..
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

The melody and movement of dance- entertained, pulsating intermingled memories- wonderfully wtitten🌹

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kelly---
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

MERCI 🌹🌹🌹🌹

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Forever is just the invisible now-where movement and dance is part of the journey-🌹

[Lyn Anderson]

I especially like the raised and razing lines. Powerful imagery. I must confess I am somewhat confused by the last two lines. I feel like there is a word missing. Perhaps that is intentional?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh thanks Lyn...yes...i had revised that typo in my file, but not here...will do that now.
appreciate the heads up and your kind words.
j.

[Lyn Anderson]

No problem. Your work is generally error free so I thought there might be a small glitch