incomplete morning

incomplete morning

 

the coffee is cold

the lipstick on your cup

a faded smile

 

and my danish

tastes past its expiration date

as i stare at your empty chair

 

wondering why i forgot

to set the butter out

while you were still here.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/1/18

Reviews

[Cassie]

cold very incomplete morning, but why did you forget to set the butter out when she was still there?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

guess i just didn't complete her morning....thank you for finding this oldie and your comment, Cassie.
j.

[LKBillips]

I like the descriptions in this one. Very vivid in my mind. One moment's thoughts covey a thousand similar moments of regret that we just now think of.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, LK.
j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Sometimes we regret the things we didn't do while we could have after the relationship is long done

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we do...so true...thank you, Lyn.
j.

[charlie]

a lasting snap shot: absence makes the heart grow fonder. I like that this short poem can stand as a screen shot zoomed in on someone's morning, and also a metaphor for not softening the heart when we had the chance; forgetting relationships and life are temporal after all.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, charlie.
j.

[Crowley]

Hell, yeah. this has the ring of utter reality in the simplest of terms. I love writing like this takes hold of the mundane and turns it into art. You are the real deal, but I am sure that I am not the first to have told you that. Great Writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Crowley.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Sad Sack morning.
Amazingly, in relatively few words, you paint a rather comprehensive picture.
Most creative!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jimmy.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You create place and thoughts for the reader Jacob. Leftover things are deadly reminders. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Coyote...
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, the butter would have kept her there....the little extras always are important. Bittersweet one, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, my friend.
j.

[J-Suk's Hyeongni]

Very funny. I liked how you made it humourous if that was intentional.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

always try to mix humor with the emotion...thank you for your kind comment,

j.

[J-Suk's Hyeongni]

Thank you!

[J-Suk's Hyeongni]

I'll try to write with humor!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

somtimes... life gives us the wrong order.....do we take it? or send it back?....hmmm

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Queenie, appreciate your words. and the questions make so much sense..what do we do?

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I always ask the same...what do we do? Father time has always replied back...tick tock, the clock waits for no one...