houses too close together

houses too close together

pilfered enterprise

the poet's stash

diamonds uncut, unrevised   

stolen and sharpened

stoned syllables polished

in someone else's hands

magnifying glass sees the font lines

conscience blurs the lens

unhappy writers find joy in coveting neighbor's goods

bard next door moves out

thief dies unnoticed,

another suicide by pen

and even then,

he wonders if the ink is his own.

erin-cilberto

6/8/18

Reviews

[CLR9]

glass blurs the derelict
hungry bears are the shadows
all cryptic closes the drawer
and bullshit eats the floor

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, CLR9--
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your reply is quite poetic...

[Jon Roggie]

I look at this in two ways.
The obvious is someone has been swiping your lines, and rhythm.

The last line brings up another thought,
and now it gets tricky.

During a write,
sometimes a pattern starts.
Nothing deliberate,
and often unnoticed.

This leads to another branch.

The first is simple.
You have started to echo your inspirations.
Might not have been a conscious choice,
but it is a little disheartening when you realize.

The second is somehow your words match.

You have done this to me before,
and I don't mean this in a bad way.
When you have to look up references in a review...
No clue who the person is,
or what they have wrote.
Then you read it.
Those could be my words.

You got me rambling jacob.

[Jon Roggie]

Also, I would like to say this turned into a review longer than my writes!
Jon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like both directions you took this, Jon.
thanks for this response.
j.

[AYVID N]

"conscience blurs the lens
unhappy writers find joy in coveting neighbor's goods"

Its human to covet beautiful things including the words of another. But it should only inspire one to try and excel in the art, not to steal.

Full of brilliant satire, this write humbles and inspires me at the same time. Kudos sir!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, DIVYA.
j.

[AYVID N]

Its always a great pleasure Mr. Jacob.