the -itions of it all

the -itions of it all

 

you were simply

an expensive imposition

a juxtaposition

to happy

for me an exposition

into giving endlessly to the cause

cause i loved you

 

and then 

you were simply

an expensive imposition

i could no longer afford

to subject my verb to

an object of your own affection

an interjection

into my life

 

and then, 

you were simply

gone

 

 

and my intuition 

turned supposition

that my life without you

becomes an alluring

 

expedition

a proposition

i simply

welcome with open arms.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/29/18

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

Invariably, it feels so good when you stop banging you're head against the wall.
You, of course, said it far more poetically.
Excellent work, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy.
j.

[sette]

i like the flow of words the continuity and the content

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, sette.
j.

[Jon Roggie]

Given my touch of superstition, I worry about your seeming determined inclination. Perhaps a moment of introspection, while being a distraction. Have a bite to eat, and contemplate during the slow digestion.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

clever response, thank you, Jon.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Your intuition on the imposition related to the transition of your recognition quite well I think. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fabian...:)))

[Bacchus]

I get gummed up in grammar,
But this actually makes me want to relearn it all.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha,thanks, Bacchus.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Extraordinary word play. This read like you have crossed your t’s and dotted your i’s, and you are ready to embark on a new beginning or maybe delight in a rerun!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, andrew.
j.

[Stella Armour]

cleverly done Jacob, as always .... new doors opening i see :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Stella.
j.

[emmajoy]

Only you could make grammatical tendencies relevant! The gradual slimming down of emotion, the apparent willingness to carry on without a care in the world? Perhaps, jacob.. perhaps!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the gradual slimming down of emotion...great line...good for a poem.
thank you, em
j.

[emmajoy]

you can have it with my blessing.. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh wow..thanks...i was actually thinking of you using it...i will have to think on that one.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Welcoming propositions is always a good thing- expect the unexpected- never know what’s coming next - open to all allows the best to be- your mind works in wonderful ways dear Sir🌹

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Kelly.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou for your wonderful words-🌹