weatherman

weatherman

 

 

forecast gray skies

but live blue demeanor

a somnambulist in sunshine dream

 

always waking to the rain

on the roof of his teardrop heart.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/24/2018 

Reviews

[Crowley]

What a relaxing tone and a wonderful swirl of words. The weatherman here in phoenix is seldom right, even though we have sun most of the time...lol. There is always the hope that the forecast is wrong. Great piece!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Crowley.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This is quite beautiful...it is soothing and sad all at once...almost wistful in presentation. I like it very much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Fabian.
j.

[Laurierose]

Very original! I like the flow of this piece. If we could forecast the feelings in our hearts I wonder what type of storm we'd get. As for this weatherman, he sounds as if he's on the precipice of happiness though something within him won't permit it. A pensive read, for sure. I'd have a field day writing a paper or response to this. Amazing piece. Great read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Laurierose.
j.

[lightsong]

I always wonder about what inspires Your mind with such original unique words, thoughts and style... I only think then, of Your imagination, how uniquely deep, wide and fertile it is.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Light.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Last two lines leave a heavy and sad imprint Jacob.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris...
j.

[Alisa Js]

This one is sweet...full of emotional impact on this reader as I read through.

Thank you for sharing.

Alisa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Alisa,
j.

[Alisa Js]

You are very welcome. I trust all is well.

Alisa

[Alfred Kukitz]

on my trip to NH i had the angst of rain following my soul, seeing my old bud’s widow i felt like the roof disappeared.

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, you have begun a poem with your response...
i feel one coming from you...
thanks,
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

don’t hold your breath, home improvement today!

[Ted Kniffen]

'You don't need a weatherman to know which way the wind blows'
words to heed from the great philosopher...or pot head.
Either way, made sense.
A good write j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words of wisdom, Ted,
j.

[Neville]

a cerebral write indeed from a grandmaster of cerebral writes..... I once walked in my own sleep, into some one else's, or rather flew....... Nice one jacob...... N

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow into someone else's ...would like to have been there to see that, Neville...
thank you for the kind words,
j.

[Neville]

yes.. we both got one hell of a shock....and my pleasure jacob, I thought this was a great bit o writing..... N

[sette]

wow somnambulist attuned to the weather forecast something unique and creatively written

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, sette.
j.