invisible inscriptions

inspired by Christine Shaw's "In Spirit"---

 

invisible inscriptions

 

 

the silent screamers

in subtle subtext

lie buried between lines of syntax

 

obscure orchestration of oblique feelings

ostentation aside

deep inside

we weep

 

the tears run through our veins

in obscure translation

 

the silent screamers

scurry underground

words deeply imbedded

never said

 

but the heart's voice

cries out from its coffined state

 

and writes on the gravestone

what it couldn't during its life.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/16/18

Reviews

[Ardra]

but the heart's voice

cries out from its coffined state

 

and writes on the gravestone

what it couldn't during its life...

So true your words J.

Words sung after life.... a slow sad song of blues...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your read and comment, Ardra.
j.

[Neville]

Wow indeed, this is one hell of a bit o poetry...packs a decent wallop in my book... am having proba with this site and my PC, so please excuse any absences or delays my friend... N

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there are many problems that seem to occur here, unfortunately...thank you for your words, Neville.
j.

[Neville]

tis a real nuisance jacob, but hey always a treat to visit your pages....... Neville

[Chris Shaw]

So pleased my little poem "In Spirit" inspired this wonderful write from you Jacob. I particularly like the title you have chosen. Yes, there are many silent screamers buried out there in life. Ones who wish they could catch the comet's flare, knowing full well they haven't got a chance in hell. Your final two lines resonated.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris, and for the inspiration!
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... I had inscribed on my Mother’s Stone “Close to my heart I hold each precious thing the sweet day yields... until God gives us Spring”... a quote from a famous poet. My Mother also lives on in me, and I do scream for her a lot in many ways. Amen... truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing, Pat.
appreciate your words and how you relate to this piece.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Thank you Jacob... I try to
Carry on my Mother’s presence... there are quiet screams to let the world know that caring for people is always worthwhile. Amen

[Ghost]

This sounds like an epitaph to ones life or their words... I pulled me in and then the ending took me by surprise... Thanks for sharing

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ghost, appreciate your read and comment.
j.

[redzone]

I think it's one of the saddest things that we too often cannot say what we feel about someone... and yes, our screams buried deeply when they should be shouted or whispered softly to someone...

Jacob, your metaphores are never silent, nor do they scurry around, they grab hold of us and don't let go... I have missed your poetry Jacob...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights and your very kind words...Curt, it is so good to have you back at WC...have missed your presence.

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Though not really related, this piece brings to mind Rod Steiger's performance in "The Pawnbroker."
His silent scream is still being heard.
Haunting poem, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy...and he is one of my favorite actors...especially his role in Heat of the Night.read morethank you, Jimmy...and he is one of my favorite actors...especially his role in Heat of the Night.

j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A sort of life in death epitaph. I read somewhere that poets only succeed after death. It was certainly true of John Donne and Emily Dickinson. But it's the body of work, the oeuvre, that is left behind that concerns the poet more than a book or a play I believe. The "silent screamers" is an interesting depiction of how we all feel at times I think; trying to express great magnificent things that words just shrink down to nothing. I enjoyed the read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Fabian...hope you are well!

j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Had oral surgery today...due for throat surgery in a few weeks to remove a tumor so taking it day by day but I'm still in there kicking. ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thoughts and prayers are with you for a full recovery, Fabian...

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Thanks my friend. I appreciate it.