Sifting through the Palette

Sifting through the Palette

 

 

she's an artist,

but not the painting kind

or the writing kind

or the dancing kind

 

more the manipulator

with treachery as her water colors

my blood as her ink

and another partner

 

to help her will me away from her canvas 

when it's sunset

the colors want to run

but she can't

 

and i am stuck posing for her

with my nude heart

shivering from her cold brush.

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/28/18

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This poem displays your unsurpassed ability to craft an extended metaphor! I’m always in awe of your ability to do this & sad to say for the other writers on this website -- I’m always comparing others TO YOU . . . who try to pull off extended metaphors! *smile* This one not only delivers in form, but the message is also very powerfully stated! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your review is very kind, thank you, Margie.
j.

[B]

The cruel art
of an unkind lover
i love the references you placed her
quite intense

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lingering Soul---

[Neville]

Upon my word dear jacob, the wench needs a darn good talking to if you ask me, and if that fails to do the trick, send her round to me........ Tis near perfect jacob, every darn stroke of it for sure.......Neville

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Neville.
j.

[Neville]

My pleasure entirely........Neville

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Incredible metaphor and simile use in your depiction of this most evil of women..”the manipulator with treachery as her water colors”-holding her prey in thrall. Each eloquent verse a piece of her bloody canvas of broken hearts-“my blood as her ink”. Ascerbic, deadly, perfect.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"Ascerbic" love that word...thank you for your words, Annette...appreciate your insight.
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

I love that word too! Always a pleasure j.:)

[Papaya]

There is certainly an art to manipulation.
The palette consisting of the buttons to push to create the desired effect.
I am picturing an evil enchantress and yet she is likely a very troubled and misunderstood woman who has learned to play the field but is afraid to score for fear of striking out.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your insights, Ana.
thank you for the visit and words---
j.

[Papaya]

You're welcome :)

[Paul Bell]

Men can be as bright as can be.
But a woman just has to do a certain thing.
Black widow spider comes to mind.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting surmise, Paul,

thank you---

j.

[sette]

i like the poem unique theme unique style and unique content

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, sette,
j.

[sette]

you are welcome jacob

[Chris Shaw]

Second stanza so strong Jacob. The word treachery speaks a great deal( and another partner). I see bleeding from the wounds her claws have left. Wounds that are not healing. Deep wounds. Your title is excellent, great work. Universal theme. Many will relate.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Christine,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

well done sir! so emotive and relateable ...a prison of decision eh!? oh my goodness what a she devil she is ...well done ... wow!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, E.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Aiii - why we allow others to paint us with their ways- some people don’t realise the damage they do and if only they knew how you lived them so but too caught up in their own self doubt and sadness- perhaps madness more like- breaks my heart- wonderful true expression of feelings- deep and full of emotion🌹

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, and very kind words, on this poem, Kelly.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Pleasure always🌹