a casket full of roses

a casket full of roses

 

 

a formidable charmer

the nape of your neck

interacting with my fingers

eyes reaching deep within

we kissed away full moons

which seemed within our adolescent grasp

 

i lassoed your scent

with my imagination

and then fell into a chasm of foolish engagement

all the while betrothed to the idea

 

that old car's heater

would warm us into eternity

even after our lips grew cold.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/22/18

Reviews

[kentuck14]

Jacob,
Nice imagery! Careful though! You put us in the back seat!!

Tom

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind thoughts, Tom
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Caught in the “engagement” of the moment.. a poem, an account of overwhelming yet innocent immediacy-young love in the shelter of an old car “I lassoed your scent with my imagination..”- fantastic line and evocative, tender words- tender as “the nape of your neck”. A foggy vignette on the rear window, before the frost. Superb write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Annette.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

I have enjoyed your work today my friend.
"i lassoed your scent
with my imagination
and then fell into a chasm of foolish engagement
all the while betrothed to the idea"
The above lines. Solid and wonderful. Thank you Jacob for sharing your amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Coyote.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob. I enjoyed your work tonight.

[Papaya]

wow, you sure do have some really great lines Jacob!
'i lassoed your scent with my imagination" - wow :))))
that is fantastic!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ana.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Jacob you must be the champion of love lost. i'll see you at the viewing.

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

I can see the steamy windows from passion inside a car when two lovers their embrace entertain- wonderful steamy sentiments 🌹

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Kelly.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

My pleasure always🌹

[Cryingkate]

If I recall some old cars didn't have a heater but it couldn't of been any hotter that day and so it still is. very vivid and very intense in such few words. Could say it was a compact car to fit all that in just as the words to this write. If I were to grade this, I'd have to give it an A. for skill and craftsmanship.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Connie

j.

[h d e rushin]

"we kissed away full moons
which seemed within our adolescent grasp"/

what a way to expound upon the passing of time; a herb mixture that is cooked with a dish and removed before serving. Time is but a signaling apparatus, an alarm if you will brother, that let us know that
something meaning or totally unmeaning has occurred....Nice/ dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, dana,
j.

[barleygirl]

Your little vignette is startling in it's originality! I was feeling every sensation along the way. The middle stanza is some of the most expressive & imaginative writing I've ever seen! Amazing! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Margie---
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Great title. A casket full of roses, that conjured up an ending to start with. I love the line " I lassoed your scent", so original. A familiar tale of how a romantic moment can disappear into the ether, only to resurface from the sea bed years later. I have those moments too.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your reply is poetic, and better than the poem itself, thank you, Christine.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you. I am flattered.