out of touch as fingertips reach for the moon

out of touch as fingertips reach for the moon

 

 

 

an eyeful of sorrow

leaks, 

impressions upon a cheek warping with fracture

 

lives in hiding

love abandoned

technical triumphs

distinguishing features of breathing disappear through circuits

of cold color

 

not the autumn kind with brisk enchantment

but wires for veins

cyber blood flowing

the real kind clotting

in confusion

 

blink and it's gone

blink and it returns

we are subject to our own wisdom's detriment

 

and losing that which we 

have called

sentiment.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/19/18

Reviews

[Heather]

Wow, "but wires for veins/cyber blood flowing/the real kind clotting" and "circuits/of cold color"...those are beautiful expressions of isolation and a sense of feeling lost, even in our own bodies. Ironically, life is in them it's just getting harder and harder to truly feel it. Well done, and I hope more people pause to look at the moon after reading this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Heather.
j.

[R.E. Ray]

Yes, J., sentiment is one of the losses. And, our senses are deprived, especially our desire and need for touch. Well said here.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Robert.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Hanging onto time for a blink is life, gone is death but here is the loss of humanity as technology at our fingertips takes us far beyond our comprehension but at the expense of us losing touch in human warmth.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Morning Jacob I am NEVER dissapointed by your talent or words they are one the same
thankyou for this its so out my realm of understanding or intellectual capability but I love it all the same. You are one to be reckoned with aspired to

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Julie.
j.

[Papaya]

I am almost embarrassed to say what this makes me think of.
gosh. I am sure i am so way way wrong.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

would be interesting to know what you saw...
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right Jacob.
"blink and it's gone
blink and it returns
we are subject to our own wisdom's detriment"
The above lines. Real logic and wisdom shared. We all, learn with time. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Coyote.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend..

[Neville]

Spot on jacob, tis but a blink or two and gone.... I say reach for the stars and if all else fails, grab that moon and hold on to it tight, very tight indeed and try to keep them blinks to a darn minimum..... may your pen never run dry dear friend....................Neville

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Neville.
j.

[Neville]

No problem, no worries, my pleasure..............Neville

[Alfred Kukitz]

i am heavy in the veins, longing for my feet on the moon, waving the earth goodbye as cyber and i head for mars. great write!

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so poetic in your reviews tonight, Al...
a joy to read.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

i can’t stop my head!

[Chris Shaw]

That isn't living, but I bet there are a lot out there like that, tapping away on a keyboard, little contact with the real world, preferring a virtual existence. No place for sentiment in their cold world. It's all a matter of balance. Fourth stanza my favourite.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your insights are spot on...at least i see it as such...unfortunate the way it has gotten.
thank you, Christine.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I am starting to get used to your style, the way you express yourself. I rarely write free verse but I recognise it when it is good and can learn much from it. Thank you.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Hmmmm- sentiment- you are so right- what we give up to lose far more than we know being caught up as some are in this cold lifeless existence- I beg to differ to be apart from it- the sights and truths bringing me an eyeful if sorrow leaking great rivers of tears- wonderful words and places where your thought visit??🌹

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Kelly.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

My pleasure🌹