a poet's unmarked grave

a poet's unmarked grave

 

 

aftermath of you

residue incognito

anonymous ash

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/12/18

Reviews

[T Passos]

The dryness and subtlety of being forgetfulness can't be described but with the few but cunning words that were put together in this poem. Loved it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, T.
j.

[Cryingkate]

LOL. After I read this twice I had an immediate response.... " R.I.P "

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Connie.
j.

[emmajoy]

You have the ability of knowing where to put words to and for the best effect! How you manage to 'say' so much within the senryu form and have it compact and meaningful - makes me feel like giving up on words! The sadness of those words are, also, too near to the truth -as happens with artists too. They become beautiful and worthy when people have weighed their value and realise how it's missed. Brilliantly created, jacob!

(Brevity certainly isn't my strongest genre!)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, em.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

this one must have peep out of the pen and roared.

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al.
j.

[James]

Great little poem, Jacob. Little pieces of memories from a lost loved one, a lost love, scorned lover. I Aftermath, leads me to think about a painful breakup that's never fully resolved. Burn the pictures and left clothes but the memories are always there....anyway's, just the thoughts your poem put in my head.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, James.
j.

[J. Hampton]

indeed...
powerful and relatable

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, J.
j.

[sette]

what an expressive powerful choice of words.. the recognition of the poet does not matter on the greatness but the worth as a person. good and nice writing my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, sette.
j.

[sette]

you are welcome

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Title is jolting and compelling. Perfect, stark, noir senryu. Consummate use of metaphor. “Aftermath of you”-ultimate indictment. Murder by apathy. Futile epitaph. Brilliant.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Annette.
j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

...a masterpiece of a haiku...always good reading!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kelly.
j.

[BBP]

Always love your writes J. Makes me think that our writing are like pre-spreading our ashes before death, so we live everywhere and live again each time someone new reads our pieces.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"we live everywhere and live again each time..." i would like to think that, too.
thank you, BBP---
j.

[BBP]

It’s worth thinking that cause if we are wrong we will never know any better anyways lol