something in the room

something in the room

 

 

a comatose heart

intravenous drops of your love

keep my breath aware

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/12/18

Reviews

[Papaya]

to me it feels like the hanging on, when loves cup is near empty those drops keep us hanging on hoping it might one day be revived.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that...thank you, Ana.
j.

[Papaya]

It was my pleasure :)

[h d e rushin]

something about your last few entries: I don't want to be tormented; therefore I am, by and large, not an honest person at least when it comes to poetry. In fact I can be greedy in my enter-inter workings like the watch in your drawer that has stopped ticking but summons memories just by seeing it again. the "something" I think is what keeps us awake at night scrambling for a working ink pen in the dark. It is way more than just love, I think, it is specific love that beckons those parts of us that have long sense forgotten how to dance in clover. I even feel the assonance that lives in "intravenous drops".//great poem my friend./ dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, my friend.

j.

[lightsong]

keep Your breath aware to any nuances that may come into the room, then suddenly to make it alive with any nuances from Your beloved, the drops of love, surge through like the warmest kiss, it's all about the right and perfect timing to awaken the heart...

it's the first time I see You writing in this form, but it's still carrying Your own special imaginary and brilliant mind.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is the only "form" i actually am comfortable using...i have other senryu and haiku posted...i do appreciate your kind words, Light.
j.

[lightsong]

will check them too, when I can, and well I don't write with any form so no worries lol

[Ruth]

The only thing to keep us living at times...this aches with a potency so strong and yet delves right into the bones of the issue...you always impress with your imagery Jacob :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Poppy.
j.

[sette]

i like the description of the comatose heart, it seems that there comes a point that it will just revived itself from a deep sleep because of perhaps a loving touch of a loving person?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that...and hopefully it is true.
thank you, sette.
j.

[sette]

you are most welcome jacob