close to the rhythm

close to the rhythm

 

 

impertinent touch

lovely hands massage heart's incentive

it's a fine line between unwanted interruptions

and delightful delays

 

we just need a reason to procrastinate our song

 

so the lyrics can gather momentum by sunset

and pens gather sounds 

like soft flowers

that don't care about time.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/22/18

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

There is a devil may care attitude going in this one. A reason to procrastinate.....we put off till tomorrow so often and sometimes it even makes sense....till it doesn't. There are interruptions in life that are welcomed....even hoped for. Your poetry always makes me think. I like that. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi.
j.

[Robin Saxon]

As anyone trying to do anything knows: 'it's a fine line between unwanted interruptions and delightful delays'. Good poem, Excellent line.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Robin...appreciate your read and words.
j.

[Leslie Philibert]

A fine poem, with ,I think, an excellent fusion of themes, the heart, music, beats, all different sides of a single poetic observation, excellent.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Leslie.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Have run out of superlatives; forced, unfortunately, to descend to comparatives.
You're not quite Frank O'Hara but deeper than Ogden Nash.
Outstanding poem!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are kind...and no, there is not another Frank O'Hara...he is one of my favorites, and to whom i aspire...
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

And so the poet hunkers down over a cluttered desk seemingly engrossed in writing when a love bursts into the room...

all bets are off...

Inspiration has arrived...let the song begin.

Good write Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ted.
j.

[Cherrie]

All writer's suffer ADD when it comes to tunnel vision of creation. A slight smile, or enticing look and all at once our train of thought is at the station.
You nailed it with this enticing gem.

[ms. barrie]

exquisitely penned! i love the way your words spinnned a web of whimsical, romanticism of longing.

my favorite lines are the closing stanzas. i also love the title of this. nothing more i can say except that this is simply stunning!

i thank you for the read!! ~ x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, barrie.
j.

[emmajoy]

For some odd reason, i find some wit in this, perhaps a smiling heart that feels the true reality of an 'impertinent touch' There are indeed those magical touches that set the bells chiming like crazy and oh! the ensuing flights of fancy along with them! The pauses, shared in secret places, studied.. treasured.. those are the delightful delays that lead to.. the un-caring of time. Perhaps? .

Fine nuances, result: erin-clberto at his finest.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, em.
j.

[sette]

when you are with the one you love you wish that time stopped. so romantic

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that would be nice...thank you, sette.
j.

[sette]

but who are we to stop the time? my pleasure always

[Alfred Kukitz]

your closing melted me into the mush of poetry.

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al.
j.