a Very Short Story

 

 a Very Short Story

 

 

foreplay/

then foreclosure

i am back out onto the street

without so much as a note

to sing my last song with you

buttered toast, then jammed

like the locked door to your heart

my will, scraping the pavement

as i think of old times

getting excited, touching your hand

and other skin

that sought my groove

melodious eruptions of fantasies

the gushing well,

a house built of

glances, small talk and affidavits

of feelings signed

then disregarded

annulled

no unscrewed Smuckers

just a screwed schmuck

no bed before breakfast

no breakfast before eviction

my affliction/

a worthless piece of paper

worn shoes

and a heart searching an antidote

for an anecdote.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/13/1o

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

Jacob I saw my cardiologist yesterday. I can give you his name and number. Maybe a pill will help?

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...thanks, Al.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

A short story indeed j, but when the pages settle,I see freedom and relief.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew.
j.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Word play at its finest. Really masterful work.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cherrie---your words are kind.
j.

[Neville]

A very short story but an epic poem jacob, so much said in so few words & nothing short of brilliant.......A great write...............................Neville

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Neville.
j.

[Neville]

The pleasure was most definitely mine jacob........

[Jimmy Yetts]

A masterful write.
Word play and use of metaphors--almost frighteningly clever.
Brilliant work!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy...
j.

[AYVID N]

Matchless wordplay and the way you convey the disappointment, with a resigned humor. No words. Mind blowing and more Mr. Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, DIVYA...
j.

[John Ciarmello]

Hi Jacob! A fantastic piece here. Your wonderful word choice added balance and intrigue. Well written my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, John.
j.

[John Ciarmello]

welcome sir

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Your metaphoric reference never cease to wow me.

Oh those relationship that start the hottest burn out the fastest.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Dale.
j.

[sette]

what a sad poem but says it all the pain of loving and all those dreams shattering before your eyes.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, sette.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Sometimes we allow ourselves to be tempted and tried much to unbelievable truths of what we choose not to know until it is all that we can see- harsh reality that what we thought was - was never no matter how we tried believed sometimes we just better accepting and removing ourselves out and away- need to guard of heart we only have one- intense images displayed here of rejection hurt and abusive behaviour never to be wished upon nobody - sad but reality - hope healing comes ... great words very touching and true to the experience 🌹

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Kelly.
j.