Rapunzel's Keepsake

 Rapunzel's Keepsake

 

 

daffodil rage,

even the dandelions cower

you threw my affections

from the highest tower

 

the weeds of memory grow thick

and righteous

the soft turf turns to rock

the pain in surplus

 

bends in the hard rain of indifference

the water on cheeks of sad bloom

of sad tune

yet the heart still has room.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/12/18

Reviews

[Neville]

Cor, now this is certainly different....Extremes of emotion depicted here with such consummate ease & that first verse would be to die for (probably in more ways than one)....A true gem in my book. Cheers jacob.....Neville

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Neville...you are a kind reviewer.
j.

[Neville]

Not kind my friend but I do have some integrity & always try to be open and honest & tend to call a spade a spade.............Neville

[AYVID N]

Oh...a rhyming poem from you and it is such a treat to read. Heartbreak and hope find expression in such masterfully crafted verses! Thank you for this gem, Mr. Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, DIVYA..
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Love turning to distaste and nearly hate....happens all too often. I liked the reference to Rapunzel. No matter how many times it is broken, though, the heart still has the chance of loving again. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi...
j.

[KeeD]

I wish this were a verse in the original fairytale. It covers the loneliness in that room and includes all the surrounding emotion that comes with how beautiful creation is and how hurtful creation can be. A caged bird with the ability to show love despite not knowing what it is for so long.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your insights...thank you so much, Kee.
j.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

The creativity here is amazing... definitely a piece to grow on! Superb write!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Travis.
j.