Visitation

Visitation

 

 

just supposing

i kissed your name

across the lips of my mind

would your thoughts politely decline,

kiss me back on the forehead of my intent

 

tap the shoulder of my advance

with a brush-off smile

and a slight tear

 

you have buried your feelings 

within cheeks having custody of your heart

 

just supposing

there exists a key

to unlock your acceptance

and i found it

 

would you opt for parole

or retreat further

into the cell you created

for that which beats within you

 

 

but could beat within us.

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/21/18

Reviews

[emmajoy]

.. just supposing ~ there exists a key ~ to unlock your acceptance ~ and i found it ~ would you opt for parole ~ or .. .. .. '

You really are the master of metaphor, jacob! I swear you could convert a telphone directory into extraordinary language! Seems finding a way forward is a concern; to date, perhaps a void between contemplation and satifaction?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind, thank you, em.
and great pic.

j.

[R.E. Ray]

Your title more than hints at the conclusion; a mere "visitation," no touching, kissing or physical intimacy. So, the visitor is left with his/her imagination and desires to get behind the metaphorical bars, or for the "jailed" to see freedom. Of course, some are not willing to leave the safety or confines of a caged heart, so visitation remains the only option. Another clever metaphor used so well in this piece, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, and your very kind words, Robert,
j.

[Ardra]

This one's sadly beautiful :)

Very nicely done...:))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Galadriel.
j.