i squared

i squared

 

 

you were a calculated risk

my math was too brisk

and invariably unreliable

 

i was a supposed sum

of what damage you could multiply

when you wanted to,

 

the X and the Y

and now i wonder why

i was drawn into your equation

when my senses surely surmised

 

i would end up 

an imaginary number

                                   in your conscience

 

and a negative one 

                                         in mine.

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/6/18

Reviews

[Chloie Kato]

I enjoyed this thoroughly. Mathematics used as a metaphor to describe human relaionships and feelings is a very interesting concept and you so skillfully executed it. I loved it. I love it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chloie...
j.

[redzone]

did you know Jacob that the square root of love is
P A I N times Pi into infinity and elongated by its proximity to an event horizon... it's where imaginary numbers and negative numbers meet in a supernova of algebraic abstractions... or in other words.... OUCH!!!

I see you are doing those math problems again Jacob... the new math where one plus one = negative infinity... ;0) but your poetry always adds up Jacob...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Curt...yes, good old Pi...3.14...aahhhhhhh---pain in the circle....
you give me smiles my friend...thanks for that.
And for the kind words.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

lol an entertaining, clever write to show that relationships are not simple maths but rather complex in their equations.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, andrew.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

I enjoyed the algebraic metaphor, Jacob! So often people wondered why I could be an accountant and write poetry too. This poem should have been what I showed them! :) An imaginary number....too often one side of the equation is reduced to that by the other side of the equation! Very good. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review...and i am sure you were an excellent accountant.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

wonderful algebra ...a delightful read ..even if it is the demise of successful solutions ... could not help but think of my friend Einstein ... who was terrible at math .. had university students work it for him so he could publish his "intuited" solutions ... nice one jacob...enjoyed the read ... fun with numbers tho wreckage enough in the end :(
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

even Einstein needed help? i like hearing that....i am terrible with anything mechanical or electronic...
thanks for sharing, my friend.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes...he did...surprising isn't it ... he knew he was right but did not quite know how to explain how he got there ... almost like poets and poetry :))))))))))))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

good grief...i so agree with you, E.
i never have any idea where the poems come from...they just do---i am just a conduit...no control over what happens and can't really take credit for what i write.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ....................

[Shy Joe]

I find it easier to play with math and logic, rather than toying with the emotions of a relationship. Although, when you combine the two as you have, you can go back and check your work. That way when she brings up the past as a weapon of intent, you can be ready with the answer key.

Nevermind, even when you're right you're wrong. I forgot. Just chalk it up as lost homework.

May your calculator always express 58008 upside down. Thank you for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh i just really enjoyed this response...thanks Joe.
gave me a smile....my calculator is always upside down.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Jacob may I recommend poetry as your forte, leave the numbers to the gamblers.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

hey, Al...i know when to "hold it, and when to fold it"

ha ha...thanks for the smile.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

As always Jacob you do not surprise me with your great work !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Julie.
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

This reads as more then the sum of its parts j. Anything less will not do. This adds up to a good write...well worth a calculated risk. Calculus was never my strong suit.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ted.
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Aaagh- I failed algebra and had to take it over in summer school! I hope I can understand this very clever poem. Great title and metaphor use. Each line perfect and on-point. Again, I don’t know how you create so brilliantly j. In life, as in relationships, it seems that we need love as a common denominator. Negative numbers keave us in a black hole. “ You were a calculated risk”- ah well, aren’t we all?? Superb!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Annette.
j.