rhyming into debt

rhyming into debt

 

 

audits, debits and love

audibles, decibels and hate

broke but happy

broken, bankrupt

poor of heart

pain costs lifetimes

accounts closed

 

eyes open to the transactions

of years, of tears

of lyrical endings

of poems

written off as bad loans

 

we only borrow emotions

that are ephemeral lendings

 

of lyrical endings

of poems.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/20/17 

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Can't put a price tag on emotions...yet they are more valuable than any bauble found in a store. Better to have a heart full of love than a wallet full of money...in theory. Unfortunately love will not pay the grocery bill or the rent. A nice middle ground is needed...balancing all scales. Your poetry is always wonderful, Jacob. Lately I have not had the time to read and adequately review. I apologize. Lydi**

[lightsong]

Richness is in heart and spirit, in mind, never in materials, You see sometimes poor people but their faces are smiling, we, poets tend to take a little feeling and exaggerate it bigger and bigger to create a poem, and sometimes we wonder how we did sweep though that emotional state into that intense level, sometimes it's all gone after we finish it, sometimes a moment from the past we bring into the now, and write it a page... not because we are still stuck in the past, but more about creating, I think of all of this while reading Your wonderful words.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Light.
j.

[raj24]

it got me back to my accounting books, the only difference here we are talking of emotions instead of money. after a long time i am reading something here, enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the reading and comment, raj

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Spell bounding Jacob, its funny I see a few interpretations here or deviations but that is just me, the flow had me thinking of us all being the 7 dwarfs singing hi ho hi ho it's off to work we go, in for a dollar in for a pound with nothing to show. As for my poems most have a short existence spiralling into lyrical death whether rhyming or not lol.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, and the smile, andrew.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

you are welcome j lol:)

[Alfred Kukitz]

Heartfelt. Moored to the dollar of emotion you can float in the harbor never seeing the ocean’s expanse.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a profound insight, my friend...

your one sentence beats the heck out of the poem itself..
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

love this Jacob
have been off the site for a while
weeks actually
how are you?
hope you had a great xmas

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you Julie.....appreciate your kind comment....
doing fine.....hope you had a good Christmas as well...

[Zyphril]

I like the rhyming in this. very succinct.
Your ability to maintain a pace with the writing was noticeable as well. Didn't really stutter while I read it. Interesting to say the very least.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Zyphril--

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

"Lendings-endings" the only rhyme I see.
Accounts beautifully balanced, however.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not just end rhyme, in rhyme...thank you for your kind review, Jimmy.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Not really being a poet, subtler rhymes often elude me, Jacob.
Sorry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think the idea is that they are somewhat elusive---never need for apologies, Jimmy---
never with poetry...
i appreciate all of your feedback....
j.