test runs and tragedies

test runs and tragedies

 

 

taking curves at breakneck speed

love groomed for instant gratification

leaves many hearts fatally injured

the emotions that engine the grief sudden

 

the smiling conductor falls out  the window of the soul

deeper incisions are made

in the tracks of tearful disharmony

screams hug the victims

 

testing our resolve,

but first time lovers

never stay on the rails

they roll over barren wastelands

covered with vascular brokenness...

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/18/17

Reviews

[marilyn 1225]

my favorite line also is: the smiling conductor falls out the window of the soul

deeper incisions are made

first love's innocence and then later years change to the screams and to reality and falling off the train tracks great poem typical from you!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you marilyn....actually the inspiration came from the news...that amtrack going to too fast that crashed---that was quite tragic...

j.

[marilyn 1225]

of course so true i forgot all of that when i read your fabulous poem lol forgive me and Merry Christmas to one of my favorite on line poets your kindness is amazing

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nothing to forgive...i am glad that you didn't see the reference...i wanted to make the poem universal...i was just saying that when i was watching the story...it inspired the concept ....
thank you for your words, as always.
j.

[marilyn 1225]

good to hear and yes it is universal that was how I interpreted it the first time reading... m

[redalia]

lovely imagery and metaphors. it's as if you put a long story/statement into a short poem. i love the line "the smiling conductor falls out the window of the soul"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, redalia.
j.

[lightsong]

Life is fast, and in a glimpse a new life is born, or a life is gone... no one can feel those who lost loved ones but those whom are in the same situation, I think of wars, disasters, violence... and how sometime love hurts us little by little, taking things from us little by little, until suddenly we feel, we become empty... that love once there turns into nothing, a space... then we think, maybe if we freed ourselves from the locks that control us, we might never reached that place, if we freed ourselves from all the negative human feelings, the creeds, religions... etc we might never reached that state of nothingness, if we kept our beings, as their reality, genuine, we might never allowed it to happen, it's us, the key, Your words make me think of many thoughts... Thank You*

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Light...you make me understand my own poem better---
read morethank you for your insightful words, Light...you make me understand my own poem better---

j.

[lightsong]

You are warmly welcome :)