little strangers

little strangers

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

little strangers 

 

 

 

at the cocktail party---

pretensions appear as necessary

as olives to a martini

toothpick conversations

adroitly administered

as i dribbled coca-cola on my tie

 

and spied the cutie in the corner

looking bored as i

eyes trusting the ceiling to get her through

the hours

 

i slid over to her side

chancing we could both abide

if i recited her a love poem

when i got her alone

 

 

she winced as if slapped by my advance

reached for the caviar

gave me an expensive glare

pointed to my stained cravat

 

embarrassed me 

back to reality----

made me wish i were

old enough to indulge

in something stronger.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/12/17

© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto


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The gauche kid finding his way, and pitfalls, in a "sophisticated" adult world. We've all been there Jacob:-) but I loved the sad observations of something I had mercifully forotten.
N

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you for your words and relating to what is written here, Norman.
j.
didn't she just miss a lot of opportunities to hear out the beautiful poems...loss on her part :)

i guess not the correct venue to find the one who will have patience to hear you out :P





Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

i like your reply...once in a while able to get through to some of these people...but for the most p.. read more
This is tragic but comical. If you're not on the same plane, the same level,one can be read as strange or weird sadly, just naivety on their part. I can relate to the comedy of errors here, top stuff!

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, andrew.
j.
This made me smile. Some people really are too presumptuous, so to speak ;p An enjoyable read for me.

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you, Yumna...appreciate your words..
j.
Dr. YumnaKay

6 Years Ago

You're welcome, Jacob. A pleasure always :)
At this disturbingly advanced age, my incessant recollections almost exclusively highlight personal failures, humiliations and near-crimes. Left to my own devices, I rarely seem to boot up anything positive.
Enough about me.
"Little strangers" is smartly done, perceptive, touching and amusing--a piece I like very much.

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words on this piece, Jimmy.
j.
I really like the details in this piece because it puts you on site.
"Toothpick conversations"
That says so much. A most enjoyable read jacob.

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you for your read and comments, duff,
j.
duff

6 Years Ago

You're so welcome. Another fine piece.
Love the surprise! Although it disappoints it amuses the eyes.

Regards,
Al

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you my friend.

j.
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BBP
This was really cute. I like the twist of him being so young at the end. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you, BBP...

appreciate your visit...i'd get you something to drink, but i'm too.. read more

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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