semantic derivatives

semantic derivatives 

 

 

 

you are my soft demeanor

the other side of chaos

my heart's balance

you are the interruption

in my series of heartbreaks

love's recomposed incentive,

when incentive has absorbed itself 

in raucous undoing

 

the half-smile

longing for your half to make us whole

the nodding word

to my interrogative longing

 

i am a question,

you, the answer

if only you would change

my punctuation

to an exclamation point

 

my dejection

would turn happy interjection

 

and our sentence, complete.

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/4/17

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is one of my new favorites of your semantic sussings! To me, this is tightly crafted as more linear than most of yours, so my methodical mind is getting it big time! *wink! wink!* Love the 2nd & 3rd stanzas, especially! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Margie.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

all a matter of semantics ;} themes and metaphor have another go round in this one ..i have to say i have liked others better ...not sure why just yet .. must come back in another state of mind ...make sure my diagram is correct ;)))))
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i appreciate your honesty...thanks for the read and words, my friend.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .......................

[Neville]

What a literally brilliantly crafted literary composition for all us would be wordsmiths, authors and poets out here to consider, when we think about and write about love....Another great write jacob...N

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Neville,
j.

[Shy Joe]

It take two to make a conversation. Well, sometimes. But it's nicer that way anyways. I've turned my question marks into exclamation marks before. What a monstrosity. Less embarrassing though.

I guess more eye contact is in order for all of us. Hard to raucously undo such a connection when two souls intertwine, intimately, in such ways. I find it hard to do this with the same sex though. Let's not dwell into that self psychology. Something's are better not conversationed about.

Enjoyable as always. Thanks for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really appreciate your insights, Joe...
thanks for reading and sharing...
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

As always expressive and filled with thoughtful emotional phrases and metaphors. How we become attracted to another and see them as making our lives complete. Been there too.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John.
j.

[Ardra]

the half-smile
longing for your half to make us whole
the nodding word
to my interrogative longing

i am a question,
you, the answer
if only you would change
my punctuation
to an exclamation point

this is a wonderful poem J...made me smile..
am glad i found this one in morning :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Galadriel.

j.