Mermaid Shoes

 

 

 

 

 

Mermaid Shoes

 

 

 

fabled love lost in a sea of unreality

we swim toward danger,

she protects us,

we breathe in the watery kisses

and she breathes for us

 

poems float to the surface

but the other words get tangled in coral reefs of intangible diction

 

themes can't break free

all at once we stop struggling

a few haikus

float from our lips

 

we let go

another poem is born

but we don't live long enough

to witness the birth.

 

yet,

even in death, a heart may still

 

beat in iambic pentameter

looking for the right rhyme

to walk in sway

if the sound of the waves

 

moves the fingers that way.

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/2/17

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Any poem involving water, waves, and words shared, well, it is a winner in my book! I've been away too long! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you my friend...
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The water muse has blessed you with waves of inspiration.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dale.
j.

[MsJewel]

You have stolen my heart with this one Jacob...the ocean..the waves..mermaids...beautiful poetry. Julie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Julie.

j.

[lightsong]

magical... wonderfully magical, and with a fantasy tale You gave us the lesson, like the little children, I see one important thing all along, to "let go, and it will come to You", a poem, or any creation don't birth by force, or these tense feelings will be transferred into our papers, it should be easy, flowing easily... wonderful poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Light.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I enjoyed this one...a few great word choices in the opening line. Perhaps the mermaid longs for shoes or feet to wear them like Ariel. I hear the reggae chant of "Under the Sea". I think poets are like surrogate mothers who give life to children that belong to everyone else. I only hope my children are harbingers of peace, joy and beauty. It's not the way I see the world as much as the way I'd like the world to be. Bless.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think we are surrogate mothers...you certainly caught the "drift" here...thank you, Fabian.
j.

[duff]

This was a calming moment in a chaotic period for me so I thank you for that. Your lines are a splendid interruption.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is kind of you to say, duff.

sorry there is chaos, hope it ends soon.
read morethat is kind of you to say, duff.

sorry there is chaos, hope it ends soon.

j.

[duff]

You're very welcome Jacob and me too.

[Dionysian Gnostic]

I feel like this is about embracing the muse even though she's fickle and to be honest I think she keeps some of my poems locked away in a dingy dungeon sometimes and won't let me see them. If she visits you again tonight tell her I've been expecting her and of course to make sure she's wearing her shoes. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting perspective of this...thank you for your words, Dionysian...
j.

[barleygirl]

You are the only person in the world who can make "writer's block" sound so amazing! If only we could all see thru our "blocks" & find the delicious ideas you've shared here! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

but thank God for her, when the heart gets broken---we have her saving us....maybe we have break ups to have write ups.

thank you, Margie...
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The struggle with creative flow writ in an ocean going metaphor. Beware your mermaid is not a siren, but even sirens can be the muse to help break water lap upon creative sandy shores.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

What a beautiful told poem. You may have the mermaid now, don’t let go, I may just grab her for myself.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al.
j.