improvising a rock collection

improvising a rock collection

needless sentiment

becomes increasingly sediment

chipped cert

mundanely encrypted marble eyes

void of intensity

listless staring

at a life now embedded

in granite heart

stone free

as Hendrix would crone

with his guitar blasting the thought of you

through worn vinyl discord

my melody of you

needless sentiment

i am not musically inclined

or poetically inclined

to write my darkness

into your light

but i know of your moons

that shed tranquil rays

with savage determination

and the reflection

just embellishes

fool's gold

into looking real.

erin-cilberto

11/25/17

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I really love this one! I love the rock references, both stone & musical! This message sings more & more as the stanzas go by & I'm in love with the last two! So much vivid imagery (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Margie.
j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Remember the Moonlight..
and the golden times
no one is a fool
if they tried...

Way Cool............

Jazzy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jazzy---
j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

You are welcome erin.................Jazzy

[andrew mitchell]

Sometimes you need the Midas touch jacob. It’s only fool’s gold when it doesn’t work!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew...
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

All I've ever managed to mine is fool's gold--something, as you've indicated, not so pretty sans moonlight.
A higher grade of emotional iron pyrite seems the best I can hope for.
Dynamite poem!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy,
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

When love lets you down there is no place to hide Jacob. Npo place of refuge and all things turn to stone in emotional terms. You take us to the seventies in this piece with free love that was not worth the hope and commitment.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh curse the night as it holds the moon and crushes me with its beauty ..how inspiring your poem is ..vivid rock heart .. an amazing surprise with Hendrix .. you ol' hippie you ..very emotive read for me!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for relating, and especially to the jimi part...
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

:)................

[Neville]

Ah' we fossils love a bit of archaeology every now and then, and what better to listen to whilst coveting a rare piece of early concrete than good old jimmy H.

I really enjoyed this jacob and on so many different levels Still finding something new to consider each time makes it even more special....Cheers, N

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for seeing different levels in my work, Neville...encourages me...
j.