amorous fossils

amorous fossils

 

 

bones

of lovers

covered with soft sod

recently filled-in graves of graphic pain

 

skeletons of relationships

of suicide kisses

ring fingers, calcium congregations

of wedding worms crawling down 

some cryptic aisle

 

i found you before they covered us up

we embraced in a chorus of "death do us part"

and then the poison pervaded our proposition

with perpetual misunderstanding

a fatal dose of unwitting misconception

and they laid us out like Romeo and Juliet

 

no Capulets or Montagues to grieve

but ghosts of our hearts

held hands

 

and wept.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/9/17

Reviews

[drew garner]

this is sad and beautiful, poetry with actual humanity who would a thunk it lol your writing is a breath of fresh air. to rampant word games and noise that assault sincerity. Robert Christgau ounce said "irony is the defense of everything and the justification of nothing." and i would add irony is justified by having something to defend against. just a fancy way of saying thank you for your honesty.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, drew.
j.

[Norman 223]

As colours can complement, or clash, so do personalities. But sometimes discord, can be a spur to appreciating true harmony.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it can, Norman...so true.
thank you for your words,
j.

[Beccy]

Can two ever see as one? Sometimes perhaps, but sadly not always; and perhaps misconception is as much to blame as misunderstanding.

Brilliant poetry, and I thought the title a touch of genius.

Beccy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i believe you are right about that misconception thing, my friend.
thanks for your words, Beccy.
j.

[barleygirl]

Brilliant alliteration with a meaning that packs a punch: "the poison pervaded our proposition with perpetual misunderstanding" (one reason I never got married). It's one of those lines that every writer wishes he/she'd written! Your love cynicism is rich & tangy (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Margie.
j.

[Paul Bell]

I always thought they got the funeral and wedding ceremonies mixed up. Weddings really should start with the words. Ashes to ashes.
Archaeologists probably have all the answers.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah yes, so true...i think i will look one up and ask him or her about this.
thank you, Paul.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

I think legends are born from those loves that had a short existence having such intensity compared to those where the flames turned to embers then cold coals. Maybe given time all loves turn to coals cold!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

cold coals....i really like that oxymoron....thank you andrew.....

[marilyn 1225]

beautifully written a tragedy -- soulful sad mournful
what is done is done burial and death is the common
end

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, marilyn.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Sometimes tragedy can knock you over. I'm still trying to get up.

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i hear ya, my friend...i hear ya...
j.

[Anand Sehgal]

Everything comes with a shelf-life and an expiry date. Beyond that point one feels like asking a few questions to be sure :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Anand.....appreciate your words.
j.

[Tony Jordan]

Hah - see - what did I say you'd be like at Scrabble - like a Black Belt or 2nd Dan ...a masterclass in alliteration! Not to mention imagery...

When the poison sets in it's fatal more often than not - we can't simply suck out the toxins and spit them out like the old Westerns.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Tony.
j.