fresh stones

fresh stones

 

 

a pretentious pretender

spreads the love

like soft butter,

but feels like a hard rock inside

 

the daily bread tears at the hypocrisy

i smile and frolic

carry tunes in my pocket

a walking song of sanity

 

 

sandwiched into his life

suffocating in a freezer lock bag of indifference

 

 

expiration date approaching

a mayday of molding marauding

 

do you see the green spots?

it's not envy

if that's what you think.

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/22/17

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Another classic Jacob ,love the closing stanza, sharp as a strong cheddar cheese but with the imagery of gondazola cheese. Excuse spelling. Brilliant metaphors.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love sharp cheddar...thank you andrew....

j.

[barleygirl]

It feels like you're piquing my mind with little darts of barely-there recognition, trying to remember how this feels, wondering how those mold spots appear without warning . . . *sigh!* Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, my friend.
j.

[aine]

Some real creative stuff. Came out pretty well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, aine.
j.

[aine]

You're welcome.

[duff]

You have some terrific lines here. This put a grin on my face.

"the daily bread tears at the hypocrisy"

i like that a lot.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, duff.

j.

[duff]

You are very welcome.

[pragya gaur]

Very powerful...Loved it.. Got thi see after a long time... Really love it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, pragya...
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Extremely clever; biting humor.
A most impressive creation!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy.
j.

[Jacob Clifford]

Very very powerful. Hypocrisy is a plague. Enables inequity.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Clifford.
j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Some times and places and peoples
are way past their expiration dates
They may try to share the suffocation/ending..
bring down the hearty living beings
to their level of frozen bygone morals
Apathy is real and growing
Beware the Great Pretenders....

Food For Thought !!!

Jazzy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, Beware the Pretenders...thank you for your insightful words, Jazzy...

j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

You are welcome jacob.. this one is TIMELY ...J.J.

[Lydia Shutter]

Powerful words here, Jacob. Too many people care about the wrong things and don't see injustice in their own backyards. Liked the alliteration in this one and the punching imagery. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so true with your words, Lydi...they do care about the wrong things.
thank you,
j.

[emmajoy]

People's interpretations of life and - of others' poetry is fascinating. So frequently seems that ongoing thoughts have taken the reins. So much in your phrases open an anthology of quotes.. meanings familiar to past occurrnces or things said, hinted at or - screamed. Imprsioned in that plastic bag often self-inflicted.

'.. a mayday of molding marauding.. ' Interesting that.. need think and think its association with the previous few lines.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this review really touched me...thank you, em.

j.