caught in a Bell Jar of sorts

caught in a Bell Jar of sorts

 

 

 

there must be passion somewhere in this ocean of madness

or maybe the madness is all the passion we have left

 

or maybe what's left of us is what the world needs to summon

a summons,

an arrest of our better nature.

 

a coming out, of sorts

from the closet of apathetic suits

that all hang the same from the hanger of numb, twisted metal

 

our metal, our guts, our hearts

ask for the light to be turned off

shadows are more comfortable

 

when the ocean is a flooding house of white coats

something's coming to take me away

 

a suicide of caring,

will today be the day i pull the silent trigger

 

or maybe the day i put away the gun

surrender to what could be

 

and get on with it.

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/22/17

Reviews

[barleygirl]

They're coming to take me away! Ha ha! Ho ho! Hee hee! La la! I was reading most studiously until I got to that line, then my imagination exploded into a less serious direction. Thank you for the fun magic carpet ride (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha, yes, Napolean Bonaparte the III--
thank you for sharing my friend.

j.

[marilyn 1225]

awesome the ending was right on

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, marilyn...
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Another clever write j, like
opening a can of worms. The closing line is fitting!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew.
j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Sylvia Oh Sylvia... It's starting to rain..
Deep dark recesses of a mind-framed
searching a soul that can unmangle this maze
Sylvia Oh Sylvia.. It's starting to rain..

Sometimes and Ending ..... cures.

Deep/Sorrowful/Sad/Depression

Jazzy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind and insightful words, Jazzy...

j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

You are welcome .... This one hit close to home....J.J.

[Alfred Kukitz]

The what ifs are clearly illuminated in a stunning choice of poetic silence.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al.
j.

[Hebe]

My favorite phrase 'get on with it' sooo English! Desperation jumps of the page.... sounds like our world right now! Amazing!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful point of view, Hebe.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

A manifesto of profound despair.
"To be, or not to be"; more accurately, perhaps, to mentally check out or remain engaged, and accept.
Hoping the poet will do neither.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jimmy.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A bell-jar would be a difficult place to exist, so exposed and yet trapped. You create such an atmosphere of confusion and frustration and despair in this one Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John.

j.