diagram me

diagram me

i spend hours in your dreams

and you still don't notice me

just as in the awakening

you walk right by my daydreams

not even a turn of the head,

the slightest peruse

i am part of the sentence

you ignore,

the article, the helping verb

the preposition

the fragment in the scheme of things

never your complete thought

i would give my life

just to be a phrase in your peripheral

but the less you see of me

the more i fade into a bookmark

a leaf between your pages

only for show

but shown no affection

i could be an important adjective

for the noun of you

but to you

less is more

and i am more or less

expendable 

in your essay eyes

erin-cilberto

10/10/17

Reviews

[Cassie]

wow!!! I have enjoyed reading this one, this one is very beautifully written Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Cassie.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

If only the visible could feel or see the invisible like a shadow we follow unnoticed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, if only....thank you, andrew.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

i could be an important adjective
for the noun of you

Fantastic! Using the parts of speech to describe unrequited love is wonderful. Unfortunately, life can not be diagrammed as easily as a sentence can be. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

true, somehow those infinitives screw everything up...:)

thank you my friend.
j.

[Shy Joe]

I think the problem is everyone is using electric notebooks and their blinded by the light. Batteries come included :(.

Enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

appreciate your words, Joe.
j.

[MomzillaNC]

Heartbreakingly beautiful…

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you Momzilla.
j.

[MomzillaNC]

👍🏻 😎

[Alfred Kukitz]

It caused me to think about diagraming sentences and in your case the absolute significance of a major diagram of life.

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Al.
j.

[Anand Sehgal]

The despair has been portrayed to perfection. loved the write :)
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[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Anand...
j.

[barleygirl]

This is so damn beautiful! I can relate heavily, as I've faded into a bookmark so many times lately. I believe many people feel this way, utterly invisible, beyond romantic ideas of human connection & including the more far-reaching epidemic of broken communications causing rampant divisions. There's an intense wistfulness here that comes across very hauntingly (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Margie.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

I see you were considerate enough not to incorporate the gerund in your plea for diagramming. Besides putting it on stilts, it has been my experience that most folks don't really know what to do with this part of speech. (Though, being an English prof, you, no doubt, do.)
"diagram me" is typically clever and deeply insightful. Just another day at the office, for you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...poor gerunds....thank you for your kind words...and the smile, Jimmy.
j.

[Ardra]

but the less you see of me
the more i fade into a bookmark
a leaf between your pages
only for show
but shown no affection

i feel the same way as John has explained... like the teacher in love with a much younger aged student who is not bothered about how he feels about her :P

but the poem is sad yet beautiful...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, so interesting to get two interpretations of that direction...thank you, Galadriel.
j.

[Ardra]

it kind of felt like the age gap is huge that...the poet is not able to approach the lady with too much confidence :)

i don't think you were thinking of this when you wrote it hehe :P