the goodbye girl's summation

the goodbye girl's summation

when devastation is

the subject or object of a  sentence

it is never a great news story

there are no adjectives or adverbs to smile upon

when they describe the extent

of damage to sad nouns

we verbalize, idealize, and not realize

often how our words can sting 

like rabid manta

Maria was a beauty in West Side Story

but she is a villain in the real life movie

as islands are flattened

at her whim

her song is a raspy, scratchy record

with water logged grooves

it is never a great news story

from high ground

dry high ground

rich high ground

impervious high ground

we ground coarse words into reckless interview

when devastation is

the subject or object of the sentence

and even the shortest fragments

contain misdirected articles

blown away in a category five

verbal storm.

erin-cilberto

9/29/17

Reviews

[Bacchus]

Sounds like she needs a
grammar lesson.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

she hates grammar...:)))

[Lydia Shutter]

Great comparison... "Maria" in West Side Story to Hurricane Maria. Indeed, so many words have been spoken that might have been well intentioned, but were not heard that way. Words do sting...especially to those suffering. Well written. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

In a dream of a midnight storm, the crazy winds blew me away, stunned, unconscious like a broken egg I awoke to find myself in poetry's bed.

Great writing!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Al.

j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

West Side Story is on the T.V. this week. I wonder if the broadcasters are making the connection. Probably not. Storms of life.

[Paul Bell]

Maria is singing towards Britain.
News on the street went something like. Only advise us if seven days of sun are on the way. You sort of get the impression we embellish fake news here.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting....thank you for your words, Paul.
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

No Richard Dreyfuss here to pull the panties from the line. Went through a little Category One last year in the Carolinas, can't picture a Cat.5. The verbal storm after an event like this is always a matter of angst and finger pointing. Hard to fight Mother Nature. Good one, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, Ted...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

love the title ... these storms do after all say goodbye ... Thank God! says i! the satire on coverage and commentary are sharp and how i wish the neews media took it to heart ... none of them seem to care much .. they are so excited at the prospects of advancing their careers they will stand in the middle of an evacuated street ... advertising signs sailing by in the winds ..their own torsos at a 45 degree angle ... and fixing appropriate faces between their ears .. and then the story becomes the politicians ..oh how they are this...oh how they that ... and oh i can go on and on but my dog Bella demands me off the soap box ;)
E.
ps. well said sir!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

exactly, E. it is entertainment and furthering their careers...such a sad thing.
thank you, E.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah but only sensational news sells and captivates the audience with a consequent loss of empathy for the real devastation and the portrayal of reality. Vitriol on a page Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John--

j.

[FJ Davis]

Expertly woven.
You wield a quiet, razor-sharp buzz-saw.
Guess that's mixin' metaphors; I can live with it.
A*s-kicker, Jacob!

[Ayvid N]

Indeed, its never a great news story!
I wish the news industry realized it. They won't, however, dramatizing it all instead of reporting the real situation on ground. The concluding verse is awesome where you speak of "misdirected articles
blown away in a category five
verbal storm."

The title of the poem is great....
I hope and pray Maria mellows down...

Appreciated very much sir!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review DIVYA...
j.

[Ayvid N]

You are most welcome, Mr. Jacob!