on the lam

on the lam

 

 

the hiding heart beats

beneath a thin skin of love

your strip search found it

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/22/17

Reviews

[Pete]

creatively exposing. so much for pat-downs.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pete.
j.

[Pete]

very welcome sir.

[KeeD]

It feels nice to invite someone close enough that their presence itself gets your heart beating. Pulsating write Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Keegan.

j.

[h d e rushin]

i am either too lazy to learn this style of writing or to much of a dotard for any compassionate treatment that love righteously deserves......great writing my friend....dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am sure you would write great senryu...

I don't care much for form, as you can see from most of my work----but haiku and senryu are a nice challenge...and i am such a proponent of "less is more"---so i do have fun with them...but i have to be in that kind of mood to write them...can't do it any time i want to....in fact i just can't write poetry in general any old time i want to...i am just a conduit.

thank you, dana.

[Shy Joe]

If your invited to start exploring everything with your bare hands, then your bound to find something of interest. Even if you're not allowed to keep what you find....Winner winner, chicken dinner.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your philosophy...thank you for your words, Joe.
j.

[Ruth]

Such brevity and yet a world of meaning. We radiate love whether we realise it or not and the one meant to find it often will. It is not always hidden so deeply either but when stripped down to basics then the beat is heard loudly to those who recognise that energy and sound. Some vultures and some angels...brilliant piece Jacob :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so kind with your reviews of my work, Poppy,

thank you.

[AYVID N]

This is so endearing, so vulnerable and so touching! Loved it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you dear poet....

j.

[AYVID N]

You are most welcome !

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Strip search? Too much for me. I don't have the energy to give or endure one. LOL

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...thanks for the smile, Fabian.
j.

[Paul Bell]

The words are great.
But the picture gets the pulse racing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Paul.
j.

[workscot]

The fewer the words if done correctly as you have done here brilliantly,the higher the impact.A single word can be worth a thousand pictures or more.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, workscot--

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Loved this one! No matter how a person tries to hide his or her emotions, it is not possible. The truth is revealed. Ofttimes, too late to prevent another heart from breaking. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi

j.