liquid binding

liquid binding

 

 

shell casings of love

evidence of past wounding 

the blood never dries

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/17/17

Reviews

[Dargan]

very interesting imagery. good use of almost every syllable in the haiku - maybe something better than the would be available. I love the concept of "shell casings of love"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your review of my senryu, Dargan.

j.

[emmajoy]

Life, love, leaveso me scars that never heal, serving as proof one has both lived fully and loved despera tely. Your senryu -r intended or not - meant as a lasting reminder of what we have to endure to feel alive. S wimming teaches more about survival than mere paddling..

Fine, fine writing.. ambitious in brevity but.. precious.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, em.
j.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

They say; 'the first cut is the deepest' The wound may heal but the scar remains - great poetical reflections of past hurt ... :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Phill.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

It's those scars that hurt...even after they have healed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very true, thank you, Fabian.
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

I raised my father's WW2 veteran's flag this summer. A package of bullet casings ,from bullets shot at his military funeral, were enfolded in the flag. Your poem stunningly, starkly and metaphorically describes the remnants of a bad love affair, however it reminded me of my father's bullet casings. Moving write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing that , Annette....appreciate you relating to this write how you did...makes me feel i achieved what i hoped to, having the poem be universal.
j.

[BBP]

With such a small amount of words I can imagine a whole outlaw love story here.

Nicely done as always!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, BBP----
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Ahh yes as I thought and knew the band

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Love this Jacob
YOu have a way with words.
Tears don't dry easy either I've learnt
Hence the group blood sweat and tears or was it a song I'm old lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks, Julie...i actually saw Blood, Sweat and Tears in 1969...liked a couple of their songs but got dragged to the concert by my girlfriend at the time....too much brass for me..
i do appreciate your comment..
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

No worries

[Jimmy Yetts]

Apparently, Cupid has graduated to firearms--probably most utilized towards the end of a love affair.
Creatively portrayed!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy---
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Lost loves heal eventually but will reopen on occasions with certain smells, sounds or sights that remind you of that person.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so right, Dale...thank you...
j.