the totality of Eve

the totality of Eve

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

the totality of Eve


she hides the sun of her heart
behind dark shades
the damaged retinas beyond repair
as is her love
now eclipsed by years of abuse

shadows over her face
clouded bruises
a blue sky marred
the smile that used to shine
a foregone conclusion
a far gone ending

and when the fatal minutes pass
she will find her way home to
a permanent  firmament 
sink into the kinder canopy
than that firm fist that blistered her skin
with cumulus blows

like a sudden rainstorm
that destroyed a once perfect
day in paradise
before all the people came to watch
the event.


erin-cilberto
8/18/17

© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto


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I'm excited about the eclipse too... Sort of, the last two times history has recorded an eclipse of this magnitude it hasn't bode well for the human race. It's an interesting allegory between the celestial, the cerebral and the physical aka abuse. Nice work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


William Gardner

7 Years Ago

Lol, that's interesting I didn't think about that. No one is coming to Jersey to watch the eclipse, .. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

i will step outside for a moment and look up.....i'm sure.....
William Gardner

7 Years Ago

Just don't look to long sir! Those retinas are valuable.
Ah, this is very clever! Loving the imagery and the way you were able to create double entendres. My favorite line is "a permanent firmament" - it sounds so nice.

I would mention that "retinas" is maybe a little too technical of a term for the feel of the rest of the piece?

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words and suggestion, DaughterNature...
might be...but this is inspir.. read more
DaughterNature

7 Years Ago

Oh no, I totally got that part. I just meant that "retina" is a very technical term, so it sticks ou.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

will consider....thanks....

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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