like Ludwig van

like Ludwig van

 

spastic symphony

the deaf composer

screams notes in a misguided wood

 

takes walks in a black forest

depressions in the soft earth

and behind his ear

 

resounding percussion

then gentle notes 

with ulterior motive

 

they want him back,

he wants to write the music of freedom

the muse misunderstands

 

leaves him

his life conceives

a stillborn interval.

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/6/17

Reviews

[Norman 223]

Music is first in the mind, before it becomes dots on the page. Milton compiled poetry whilst blind. Emotion creates the pattern, it then emerges as reality, which we then interpret and appreciate in our own way. Your poem highlights the frustrations of reaching and achieving those goals.
N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Norman.

j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

So ironic..deaf genius composing immortal sounds ..writing for the populace, yearning for release...frustration, depression- you paint this so well in dark, haunting, muted images. "His life conceives a stillborn interval"...Breathtaking.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Annette...
j.

[andrew mitchell]

This reminded me of Van Gogh's troubled life too so did ludwig play for the masses on what they liked to hear or did he play for himself? Somewhat sad overtones jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew.
j.

[emmajoy]

'..depressions in the soft earth ~ and behind his ear ~ resounding percussion ~ then .. .. '

Those are more than empathic words. PLUS, those three final phrases are superb, absolutely superb.

That great man would bathe in your poem, probably set it to music, he'd look into your face, then, find a way. Your depth of sensitivity is extraordinary. This poem touches my heart.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, em.
j.

[emmajoy]

you're welcome.. will read again when more fully awake.. slept earlier, felt ready to party. wrong idea.. will return

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Beautiful
I had no idea he was deaf
What brilliant work from you
And him

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Julie.
j.