Farm Hands

Farm Hands

 

 

aardvarks eat ants

you eat little hearts

 

and your decaying soul

burns with desire

 

the workers carry your conscience

takes a lot of them

 

but you don't remember the innocents

you stepped on

 

you just move on

a sharp beak

molesting the blameless 

 

buried under the crevasses

of your perverted ,

straight-jacket tongue----

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/5/17

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Wow, not sure I would want to meet this person! The anger you feel for this person is palatable! Powerful! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi..
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Profile of someone you consider to be a vile predator.
There is still a lot of angry young man left in you, Jacob.
Gifted poet, too.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so glad to have poetry as an outlet...thank you for your words, Jimmy.
j.

[AYVID N]

The poem is incisive and cuts its subject to pieces. Somehow, the concluding verse, in the present times, reminds me of a much loved and hated President...Appreciated so much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting take...i can buy that...thank you for your insights, DIVYA.
j.

[Tony Jordan]

Well it seems this guy/gal is good for inspiration at least :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Tony.....even the evil ones inspire at times.
j.

[Tony Jordan]

Hitler keeps a horde of writers in good suits lol

[barleygirl]

Stunning description of those who step on the little guy as they claim their rightful position as autocrat. Distinct & raw imagery could refer to a bad-a*s lover or an abusive family member or a politician (((HUGS)))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that you could see different avenues for this one, my friend.
thank you, barleygirlread morei like that you could see different avenues for this one, my friend.
thank you, barleygirl

j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Vitriol spills from this piece, aimed at the transgressor who seems to use and abuse others. A pathos filled write Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John...am very unsure that this one actually works...but you give me encouragement.

j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I think the opening lines are original and have impact in the setting of the scene. 'you eat hearts' says so much about the person you refer to. The decaying soul also provides insight into the perception of this heartless person. This theme continues in your very precise metaphors and it works for me. If it makes me think and wonder at the use of words and phrases, it works for me Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you!