like Adam, Eve and that old tree of knowing

like Adam, Eve and that old tree of knowing

 

 

in ecstasy's womb

i kick the carcass

of what once was,

dying to get out

 

impelled toward the passion

once conceived with you

i am a stillborn flashback

and we are the procreation

 

of how eyes are the dreams

of sin

originally condemned

to a life of what if's.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/20/17

Reviews

[ROXANE DORSEY]

condemned to a life of what if's. I enjoyed reading this poem and thanks for sharing your talent.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Roxane...

j.

[Norman 223]

But if we knew, then it would probably never happen.
Such is the conundrum of life. We learn, but are still none the wiser.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, Norman....so true.

j.

[franzesty]

REALLY love this - 'ecstasy's womb' and 'stillborn flashback' are especially poignant phrases - well done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,
j.

[Mr confido]

wow... beautiful!! i love this...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you!

[andrew mitchell]

Those nightmarish What ifs that haunt the mind more so than the memory itself. nice work j loved the brevity, great metaphors. Many a names are etched on the tree of knowing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew...
appreciate your insights.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, passion once shared with another and now sought after....very much the same theme as my latest. We all wonder "what if"....sometimes, though, we are better off not knowing. Great metaphors, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Strangely beautiful
I love this as I do all you write Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Julie.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Not kind just true

[Anthony (aka Mr.e)]

Deep and thought provoking, my respect is yours...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Mr. e.

[AYVID N]

I could feel the rawness of regret, being stuck in time, perhaps longing...

"i am a stillborn flashback
and we are the procreation
of how eyes are the dreams
of sin"

Unforgettable lines...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind comment, DIVYA--

j.

[Zugzwang]

When we lose something like this it can seem that a little death and it is this sense that has co.e through most clearly for me in the poem. A sad piece but the imagery is so powerful.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Zugzwang.....

j.