more than wings

more than wings

 

 

an imposing figure

your eyes as one,

tragically beautiful,

the fire within you consumes

as the fire without

 

i still stare at your complexities

as if you were real,

and standing near,

picking the strings of your guitar,

playing with your blond strands

of enticement

 

love advances planes

and i still fly in yours.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/1/17

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

An artist on stage perhaps? You listen to the music, create a fantasy looking at her eyes, her face....and the musical fantasy takes you away. Lovely, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you , Lydi...

j.

[Bacchus]

it's probably just a prop...
that guitar.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if it was, she was really damn good playing it..
thank you, Bacchus.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

https://youtu.be/VJDJs9dumZI

i thought of that song right away ...so many of our artists lost at sea, earth and air ... i am thinking of those in the times and genre that i listened to over and over ..and still do ..and in all cases the biggest tragedy is the music they should still be writing and singing and playing ... when youth dies it makes absolutely no sense ...especially today when 100 years old is more and more common (three at the same time in just my mother's family) :( i think that keeping to yourself any certain artist creates more reverence and respect somehow ... "your eyes as one" captivating to me ... invites spirituality for me ... the strings and blond strands is intimate and romantic ... lots of stuff in a little poem sir!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E.
j.

[AprilRN1210]

awwww this made me smile, the ending especially. could throw that in any romance movie/novel and would become a classic. whatever it is that is tickling your fancy, it is inspiring lovely work. love this one Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, April...
j.

[Mark Mendoza]

I enjoy the representation of the fire . the energy in a flame as well as the burn. Thanks for sharing

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Mark.
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Maybe picking at the guitar strings helps know how to pull at the heart strings too...
The 'still' in this gives it a nostalgic touch.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Yumna...

j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Jacob.

[Poetic Beauty]

Ahh that fateful chance encounter of meeting someone that captures your attention for decades.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Poetic Beauty..
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Another one for stimulating the grey cells. It struck me as a tribute to a singer killed in an air crash but that was a s far as I got. As always 'on point' for a good read Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that thought/interpretation ...thank you, John.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

You apparently had (or have) a beautiful, statuesque, fiery blond, guitar-playing, Cyclops lover.
That's certainly a hell of a lot "More than wings"--even the angelic variety!
Stunning, though somewhat mysterious, bit of work, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

actually a best friend....thank you for your words, Jimmy...
j.

[Jon Roggie]

I like this. For some reason this makes me think of Heart.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i appreciate that reference....love them...thank you, Jon.
j.