Never after

Never after

 

 

Cinderella's swollen ankle

broken slipper

the horses break for eternity

at a cantor

 

her pumpkin overripe 

spatters into shards---

her sisters' revenge

an evil sibling gets the prince

 

he is dumbfounded and naïve

the quiet sweetheart

keeps sweeping up the remnants

 

of her fractured heart.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/1/17

Reviews

[Rebecca Leigh]

I love that you gave a spin to the Cinderella fable... just a suggestion... I would continue with it... it sounds like it's incomplete and a bit rushed, you can add details and really make it a lovely piece

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your nice comments and suggestion, Rebecca...

j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

What?- "Never after?" My girlhood dreams up in smoke!..."an evil sibling gets the prince" and the fairy tale is "fractured"! Sssshhhhhh! Don't tell the kids...or Disney! Ha- ingenious!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Annette...remember the Fractured Fairy Tales on Rocky and Bullwinkle..??? :)))

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Oh God yes! Was the narrator Edward Everett Horton for that segment? Great writing on that show! Thanks so much for reminding me j! Hope you had a great 4th!:))))

[Paul Bell]

What have you done, Jacob. Kids are running about screaming now. Lies have been told in this fairy tale.
Told them to man up. Though i maybe dropped hints to your whereabouts.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the smile, Paul.
j.

[Zugzwang]

A fun play on words and, who knows, perhaps a more realistic take on the old fairy tale. Reminds me of African refugee stories I've heard.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Zeitnot..

j.

[ms. barrie]

this is a wonderful, original twisted and way more realistic/relatable take of the oh so famous "ever after" ---
i adore the slightly macrabe
imagery weaved within this
ink.

thank you for sharing
-- xx --

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, ms. barrie.
j.

[ms. barrie]

you're most welcome, jacob, it was my
pleasure :)

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

It always seems like the lovingly innocent suffer at the hands of the ever scheming. The quiet sweetheart suffers in silence, ever-loving, ever-sad.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Linda...
j.