Never after

Never after

 

 

Cinderella's swollen ankle

broken slipper

the horses break for eternity

at a cantor

 

her pumpkin overripe 

spatters into shards---

her sisters' revenge

an evil sibling gets the prince

 

he is dumbfounded and naïve

the quiet sweetheart

keeps sweeping up the remnants

 

of her fractured heart.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/1/17

Reviews

[Seeker]

Yes, if we only learn of reality tampering our expectations and hopes. A great challenge to an assumed happy ending.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Seeker.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

A fractured fairy tale for sure! Never trust an evil sister! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your visit, Lydi.
j.

[Jon Roggie]

Another take on the myth.
I still need to sneak into one of your classes.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you don't have to sneak in, just knock on the door...you would be welcomed.
j.

[Cory Barrett]

Finally somebody tell the truth about this little tale!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cory

j.

[Brittany Zedalis]

This actually made me kind of sad, haha. I'm the kind of person who tries to believe in happy endings, but it's true that they don't always happen. Despite the sadness, I still enjoyed reading it.

~Luna

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Luna.

j.

[Poetic Beauty]

Sometimes in real life there isn't a fairy tale endin. I love the twist on this classic

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words,
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

I love it when writers get creative and turn something old into something new.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

There is no such thing as a complete happy ending once the perfect moment is over.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Dale.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

In real life we have to leave the fairy tales behind us and often end up sweeping up the pieces as others determine our fate in love's shadow. Sometimes we watch love's demise knowing we love that person still. This seems a simple metaphor at first but it has a make-you-think quality within your wonderful thesaurus of metaphors Jacob.

[andrew mitchell]

nice work j, its funny if the shoe fitted she would not have lost it lol. i remem bullwinkle and rocky.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew...
j.

[Great Aunt Astri]

Oh, this is very touching. A bit of hard reality, as she 'keeps sweeping up the remnants,' not only of her fractured heart but also her sisters messes I expect!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Aunt Astri.
j.