a Heaven's haiku

a Heaven's haiku

 

 

the lost explorer,

gnarly stars not withstanding

penance, his flashlight

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/1/17

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Such deep thoughts in three short lines, Jacob. A sinner doomed to wander the night with only his flashlight lighting the way....perhaps in the inner city where the stars dare not twinkle. A lot to read in between the lines of this one....I liked it. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and you are one who reads much between lines, my friend....such an astute lyric reader.....
thank you,

j.

[Anthony (aka Mr.e)]

I see a man finding his way with the tools he has been gifted...deep haiku, it was a pleasure.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Mr. e

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I think we are sky bound; but being earth bound in life, we forget where we're headed. I'm so glad to live in the county where I can appreciate the stars. Living in the city doused their light in many more ways than one. Love this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Linda...and yes...me too..living out of town, lots of trees but i get a great view of stars out here...far from my roots way back in the Bronx with all the skyscrapers and city noise and smoke...

i love country..Vermont is still my home in my heart...

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Here! Here! I grew up in the city as well, nothing as big as the Bronx for sure, but still the city. I love living in an agricultural area. The boughs reach for that quarry of stars, and one can't help but be drawn to that night sky.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Always figured any penance offered served to make the sinner feel better--as if he or she had, somehow, come closer to "squaring things." Didn't seem to me that God kept track of such things.
He appeared more interested in the purity of one's heart.
Stunning little number, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, the heart...i agree...thank you again for your wonderful support of my writing, Jimmy.
j.

[Papaya]

did you know that it's actually better to hike at night without a flashlight, the moonlight guides you. your eyes adjust. if you want to see the big picture, forget about the spotlight, you'll find your place among the stars regardless

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i can see that philosophy ringing true...

thank you , Ana

j.

[Relic]

Makes sense to me. I believe God orders angels to take away the batteries from the arrogant lost souls that murdered their way through life.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that thought, Relic...

j.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

'I was lost - now I am found' resonated within, as I read through your exquisite write ... just my kind of read - :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Phill..
j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Ok, I don't understand at all... but I was here, and gave it a try.................lol

Jazzy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks for trying Jazzy...but whatever you see is what it is...
j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Ok.........YRW........

[LostBoy]

Haven't read such an intellectually constructed poem in a while.
Fantastic senryu.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The religious theme reborn in a well constructed senyru Jacob. Guilt the master of the Catholic psyche.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, you are so right...it certainly is.
thank you, John.