Patchwork "Dear John's"

Patchwork "Dear John's"


is there an eloquent goodbye
or are we just passé
old lovers with short memories

but long faces,
shouted tears
or silent screams

the final note
the final signature
all wrapped up in a bow of fear

what's next?
rings like an unanswered phone 
in the darkness of the future

we hold our heads up high
but our heart's feet
are cut out from under us

no proper, or improper way to leave
just slip out with mum tongue
inertia

"eloquent" is just a word
a pretentious pretend
honesty is a door

slamming in the night.


erin-cilberto
6/27/17

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This is brutally sombre and sad Jacob. You convey a sense of inevitable pain and hurt as the 'patchwork' never seems to make sense or to satisfy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John.
j.

[Beccy]

It is in our nature to cling to hope. Like love itself, hope invades every vestige of our lives and is a prime driving force of our species. So sad that such an uplifting emotion often has such bittersweet consequence.

Beccy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful and kind review...
j.

[Tom]

It's the uncertainty of being alone that delays the inevitable and causes even more elongated and prolonged anguish, as the motions/emotions are played out and laid bare, over and over again!

Thoughtfully penned Jacob with endearing quality and soul searching sentiment, muchly enjoyed!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful and kind review, Tom...
j.

[Papaya]

we tiptoe around breaking up and delay the inevitable when it really is best to just slam that door.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, and Lord i know this....my first ex and i should have done that before we married....but we were too afraid to be without each other.
thank you, Ana.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

"Just slip out the back, Jack;
find a new plan, Stan."
Profoundly perceptive poetic perspective ending with two dynamite lines that are a poem unto themselves.
Genius!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"no need to be coy Roy, just listen to me"
thank you, Jimmy...
appreciate your visit and kind words...
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

"honesty is a door slamming in the night." this line packs such a punch! No pleasant way to leave....one foot in front of the other and never look back. Too many people stay stuck in a bad place....whether it is romantic or work related. Reminded me of the feelings I get from the song, "Already gone" by the Eagles..."So often times it happens that we live our lives in chains..... never knowing we hold the key!" (might not be exact.) Great one, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your keen insights and kind words, my friend.
j.