the scent of regret

the scent of regret

growling canines

unwanted visitors

the house, otherwise quiet

the heart beats in the dark,

the dogs approach the door

a knock resonates...

anxious hands touch wood

she tenses,

they want her,

she whispers softly to some god to save her,

the men in her life,

await,

a lock clicks,

her heart breaks all over again

the dogs attack,

jaws snapping at flesh,

but the bite marks are invisible

as are the ghosts of her past

there is a sudden hush

the ambiance becomes stifling

her memory is her own leash

her eyes snarl,

teeth of anger bared

they won't let her alone,

like paparazzi,tales of the past

                        hound her

 relentlessly.

6/11/17

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Love the first para the best very beautiful work Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Julie....

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

damn! very hard hitting for me ...i think men especially need to take heed and feel this pain and how that leash can hold and bite ... i am inspired to think about and pray for those women who have suffered abuse ... tho your poem clearly is more universal and layered than that ... i think this is one to be published and read more broadly ...but i'm glad you shared it here
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for understanding, E.

j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This has the right amount of nervous tension to keep the reader hooked...
Some memories of the past always lurk around...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Yumna.....
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

you're welcome, Jacob :)

[Priyanshi]

An interesting poem...kept me in suspense to read it the whole and i found it great....Overall I enjoyed it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Priyanshi...
j.

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure.

[AprilRN1210]

I like the pauses for effect keeping me hanging on each word eyes whipping to the next line in suspense. I had to re-read it a couple of times because I was scanning too fast the first time just to see what happens. Love it when that happens. The last time was just to savor the word choice and imagery. You were able to touch that nervous energy and fear when things haunt you. Nicely done my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, April...so good to see you around again.
j.

[rubie]

completely relatable. I think any woman can relate to this one. so very insightful.....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you.....but again had trouble getting to this box to give a response.

[rubie]

i got your response....

[Lydia Shutter]

A sad tale, but one that is unfortunately part of so many women's biographies. Some memories are impossible to erase...or overcome. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi
j.

[Giulia King]

"she whispers softly to some god to save her,
the men in her life,
await,
a lock clicks,
her heart breaks all over again" Amazing lines! Felt like this piece spoke to me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Gullia....
j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I'm closing the blinds....your watching again...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i swear i'm not....i swear!!!!!!!!!! :)))
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Our past can have a big influence on our hear and now, even if we don't realize it... Quite an intense analogy to describe the effects of bad things in the past catching up with us.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Dale.
j.