Apparition's Crimson Suggestion

Apparition's Crimson Suggestion

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

Apparition's Crimson Suggestion


you were my moonshine garden
on a late May afternoon
the aisle of you drank in my countenance
i stuttered along the path of least resistance
seeds of longing sown with certain accession

kissed you by our reflection on the lake
just before i woke in your bed of roses
bleeding from thorns of naivety

petals doing the dead man's float
in waves curling around my heart
as i came to

and you waved goodbye
just as new flowers broke ground.


erin-cilberto
6/8/17

© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto


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Love your work it's very beautiful

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you, Julie...
j.
Lovely, lilting,"crimson and clover" interlude between lovers..."you were my moonshine garden......the aisle of you drank in my countenance". Passionate with beautiful imagery and metaphor use. Exquisite poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, Annette,
j.
A hint of the bitterness of romance gone wrong seasoned with a pleasant whiff of the fragranced promise of sweeter romance anew ... Life being what it is and all ... As Forrest Gump's momma said, "Life is like a box of chocolates ... Personally, I found some of those candy looking delights to be true to life turds ... Very insightful ...

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

your review is insightful, my friend...

yes, some of those chocolates we should just .. read more
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7 Years Ago

Yep, you are right, cause ain't nothin' more disgusting than to learn you have planted your mouth on.. read more
"petals doing the dead man's float" ...powerful turn ..the font gives it just that bit of boost to cause me to read it as an aside ... the last line so sadly punctuates the bleeding ..ouch says i ..ouchy ouch ouch!
E.

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your words, E.
j.
Seems in this relationship's drifting gentleness, you were led into a place which meant so much, then - left wondering how, what, why you were alone after being enticed then, seemingly, played with. You use language so beautifully, ' .. you were my moonshine garden on a late May afternoon. '

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, emma..

j.
Only you Jacob could write something this devastatingly beautiful. Like you, I visit the ghosts too, but could never write something that astounds the mind and soul.

Regards,
Al

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, Al.
j.
Is the thrill of romance worth the devastation of abandonment?
Better to have loved?--I guess so, though resulting pain and disillusionment can last a lifetime.
Gorgeous poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, Jimmy.
j.
A sadness permeates this for me Jacob. The protagonist seems to go on a journey, perhaps a drinking spree and when he sees the light it is all too late as his love has left him. Full of emotion.

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, John.
j.
Every paragraph was really 'dreamy' and lovely..
The expression 'bleeding from thorns of naivety' was, well, Amazing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, Arjun.

j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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