Apparition's Crimson Suggestion

Apparition's Crimson Suggestion

you were my moonshine garden

on a late May afternoon

the aisle of you drank in my countenance

i stuttered along the path of least resistance

seeds of longing sown with certain accession

kissed you by our reflection on the lake

just before i woke in your bed of roses

bleeding from thorns of naivety

petals doing the dead man's float

in waves curling around my heart

as i came to

and you waved goodbye

just as new flowers broke ground.

erin-cilberto

6/8/17

Reviews

[steppenwolf]

Bleeding from thorns of naivete...
I've experienced that.
This is what poetry is all about.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Leslie.
j.

[Ken Simm.]

There is such pathos and heartbreak in this Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ken...

j.

[Chris]

We've earned our ghosts... with every teardrop behind our eyes.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, Chris...thank you.
j.

[Michael Oliver]

Ah simile by simile to get to the heart of an explanation . Again a seductive feel within the imagery that floats one in a quiet reverie. thanks Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Michael...
j.

[Paul Bell]

Always think, if you could choose that journey again.
What would you change. The ultimate meeting of two people at just the right time. The ending where pain bites you on a lonely night. What would it be.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

probably time to find a different garden....we are enticed by beauty...thank you for your words, Paul...
j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I was just outside pruning a rose bush and was pierced by one of its thorns. Love has a way of piercing the heart, its thorn forever haunting, despite new flowers breaking ground. There is always the promise but the pulse of lingering pain.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing, Linda....appreciate your words,
j.

[Alisa Js]

Hello J,

This one is quite sad, though filled with beautiful, romantic imagery...

Alisa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Alisa.
j.

[Tom]

Just when it all seemed so good, she left you alone in the garden of Eden!

Bittersweet indeed Jacob, been there had the T-shirt!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i want one of those T-shirts, Tom...thank you for your words....
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, young love....we are so naive, but it feels so good. She lured you into her bed and then vanished....looking for fresh meat. An age old tale, but your metaphors make it fresh and enjoyable to read. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi...
j.

[andrew mitchell]

The lake and dead man's float brought about imagery of King Arthur sent out in a boat to his final resting point from the movie. Excalibur. Having said that, an excellent portrayal of new lovers night rhapsody!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew...

j.