cheap returns

cheap returns

spent all my heart on you once

now the broke beats of me

can only imagine,

that takes little currency

and most often buys nothing

but a few "what ifs"

that were on sale, anyway

erin-cilberto

5/28/17

Reviews

[mou]

may be all answers are hidden in your line "spent all my heart on you ".. those who fail to understand the beat of true a heart, will also ask "who had told to spend the emotions, I like only branded famous products".. really cheap returns by the most expensive person of heart..this is heart touching..thanks for sharing with us J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such an insightful review. Thank you, mou.

j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

"The broke beats of me"- you pierced my heart with the pathos and honesty of this line. Sharp like a knife retrospective on a gold-digger (shall we say?) that took her pound of flesh in love &/or money and ran. "Spent all my heart on you once"- profound, brilliant, sad.... You're better off without her.....Great Poem! Kudos!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Annette...
j.

[Erudite]

it does hurt to be stuck in a romantic 'trade' agreement. some people just keep raising the interest rate

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words,
j.

[Jobira]

Yes, indeed.
Our emptiness is filled with those tiny, "what ifs," where our hopes lie for a better tomorrow.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your visit and words, Jobira.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

If I'm going to get returns, I prefer them to be expensive.
Gads, this piece is hang-dawg depressing.
Let me know if you're looking for any more of those "what ifs." Got me a trunk full.
Very perceptive poem, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a trunk full eh?
i have a u-haul full...:)))
thanks for the smile, Jimmy...
read morea trunk full eh?
i have a u-haul full...:)))
thanks for the smile, Jimmy...

j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

There is an emptiness echoed in this piece which replicates the void and numbness such a transition may have. As always metaphor and wording used with precision Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John...

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Sounds like there was no small change left either Jacob. well written.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew.
j.

[Gee]

At present watching good friends go through the " why's " and "What ifs " of ever bitter divorce proceedings. 20 years of marriage ruined by him entering another woman whilst the wife laid up having just had her womb removed.....painful to watch the kids put through the wringer.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

geez, that is really terrible...so sorry to hear of that.

[Gee]

Kids are resilient, they'll cope, not so sure about the wife. Thank you