slow down zone

slow down zone

 

 

spilled alliances

the drops hit the curb of ingestion

thoughts dashed against concrete logic

 

a running away from each other

lifting watermarks

dates of disclosure

of closure 

but there is a slightly ajar

feeling

 

and now---an idea is repaved

the smoothness uncertain,

 

yet to be "disclosed"---

meanwhile, actions are under construction.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/26/17

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Clever as always Jacob are your writes, sometimes I need the jacob erin-cilberto decoder to interpret the right meaning much like the enigma code!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

An array of amazingly clever, profoundly perceptive metaphors.
No slowing down for you!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Jimmy
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

"Actions are under construction"- love the sound of that. "An idea is repaved..the smoothness uncertain"- but well worth taking the risk.If new thoughts and ideas can't jackhammer the hallowed and corrupt concrete...then tell me what can! Excellent metaphor. Excellent poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Annette.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Dare I say a display of 'concrete thinking' Jacob!
The analogy gives that feeling of coldness and stone and people set upon a course.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, John.

j.