cuts, bruises, and the thesaurus blade

 

cuts, bruises, and the thesaurus blade

 

 

 

sharp lines,

by pen or tongue

abrasive verbiage

abuses a heart in limbo

 

to leave or stay within stanzas

to scan or carefully read

with tenacious eyes

or listen with tarnished ears

 

sharp lines

cut,

some like the bleeding

live for the pools of blood

take a dive between the lines

 

sharp lines

the red lines

sleepless emphasis

against articulate adjunct writer

the one who means it.

 

but the others,

just sharp lines

with meaningless edge

dulled incentive

to write,

luscious speech

center of attention 

 

you remember,

with a slight rain of doubt

maybe disdain

 

sharp lines

dulled image

once the voice is silent

there is no artifact

 

in fact,

there is nobody

the words were all bled out

part-time

but enough to have meant something

once.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/15/17

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

Virtually a tome for you--me, too.
Plainly enough spoken; needs no poorer reiteration.
Last stanza chilled me, a bit.
Still endeavoring to construct that lasting artifact.
Sometimes, your words seem to echo--hopefully down through the Halls of Time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Jimmy.
j.

[Cory Barrett]

"once the voice is silent
there is no artifact"

The best way to be forgotten certainly it to become silent.

Great writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we hope never to become silent...i fear it everyday...every poem, there is that worry that it will be the last.
j.

[Papaya]

cuts and bruises come and go but a thesaurus blade?
that sums up perfectly the misunderstanding of double meanings, the betrayals, the words that cut down your worth. Sometimes it's someone else's tongue, often our own. Really great poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ana.
j.

[B]

My grandpa always told me anything is to be tolerated but the lash of a tongue
so remain silent and only speak or write for the sake of something good
Really well done some words are so empty its like a body all bled out with no blood to keep it alive !!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your last line...thanks so much for your words,

j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This left me drained Jacob and reads like a suicide note with the sharp lines a metaphor for bleeding cuts. Its effect, packed full of emotion is brutal.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, John.
j.