what floats afar from the mind's intent

what floats afar from the mind's intent

 

 

driftwood dreams

the ripple of incontinence

the words a currency

that outlets into a tributary

that creates a poem

gushing like an up tempo creek

 

rivers find peace in verse

looking glass gyrations

a smoothly splashed sun

observes the waves of wit

 

and i, on the shore try to recompose

when my life becomes a turbulent test

of will,

 

when the heart breaks against the reef

in mellow screams.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/1/17

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

Wow! Wow! This is the kind of writing that seems unbelievable while you read it and read it again and again. Whew!

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Al.

j.

[Im His Daughter]

This was nice... great writing Jacob. Love how you used all the words of a river or stream scenery.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

appreciate your kind words,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

What have we become? When did it happen? What happened to the people we were way back when? Wonderful introspection here....and the metaphor is superb! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi.
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"and i, on the shore try to recompose
when my life becomes a turbulent test
of will,"

It seems we are forever trying to do that, composing, erasing, recomposing...
As always, I love your use of brilliant analogies, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Yumna...

j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Jacob. A pleasure always 😊

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed writing is a haven, indeed a cave in which we can scream and cry and laugh and fantasise. A safe outlet in which we can express love and anger and sadness and mirth. In this use of the first person adds a dimension I rarely see in your poems Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, John.
j.

[SJ Mullins]

::sigh:: Your imagery and analogies are always spot on. Brilliant writing! Love it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Suzanna...
j.

[SJ Mullins]

You're welcome. :)

[Alisa Js]

Well, this one certainly has a surprise in an unexpected line...

Nicely done.

alisa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Alisa...
j.