in a bed of liability

in a bed of liability


even with my peripheral vision
never saw you coming,
you were the hit and run
my insurance didn't cover,

now my deductible 
is such my heart
will never find its emotional ledger

balanced again---

it will always be as red
as the rose's obliteration
when we collided 

on love's precarious
                            garden road...



erin-cilberto
5/4/17

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, love's "garden road"....filled with thorns that we don't notice at first. The metaphor of the car accident....brilliant. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi.
j.

[SJ Mullins]

I may have to read every piece of yours today if they continue to be as brilliantly written as the this one and the last one. This is an incredible piece. I loved it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind, my friend...i can't take credit really, the words come and i am just a conduit...
but thank you.

j.

[SJ Mullins]

you're welcome. I know what you mean. It is like that with me sometimes...not all the time, but sometimes, and those, I feel, are my best pieces. :)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Jacob, you've outdone yourself here. Brilliant Allegory, metaphor sharp as a blade- hearbreak the pre-existing condition (!), the "hit and run", not covered by any insurance plan. Blindly we careen down "Love's precarious garden road". Accident waiting to happen. Perfect!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Annette.
j.

[Paul Bell]

Sometimes that's the collision we dream about. Till it actually happens. Then we find the no claims bonus doesn't cover it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your clever, insightful reply, Paul.
j.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Jacob, you never do see them coming do you? and then you're never quite the same. Great metaphor. I really enjoyed the read. Izzy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Izzy.
j.