imagining the bridge

imagining the bridge

 

 

 

draw your peace

paint your wagon blue

ammunition's running low

love bullets tear the skin

but the vests of vexation

protect the heart from penetration

 

we are all wounded drummers

carrying a different rhythm in the rain

soaked in adversity

and aversion

 

enduring excursion into senility

of interaction,

each drop of detachment

hitting the ground alone

 

not even a slight puddle of hope

shimmers in the partial sun

of clearing.

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/29/17

Reviews

[lua]

the imagery here is beautiful, intertwined with melancholy one is left feeling serene and humbled - understood, love it :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, lua.
j.

[B]

I felt a very calm mood while reading this
this is so much truth to this piece
and i guess we all share this basic emotion
loving others and taking that chance of being wounded
the sun rises all the same on every soul

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful and kind words ....
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Amazing poem. Stark,chiaroscuro,taps for the wounded drummers.Love "drop of detachment hitting the ground alone". Darkly resonating. Kudos!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Annette.
j.

[Great Aunt Astri]

Yes, I do think the 'vests of vexation,' do protect the heart! I think the 'shimmers in the partial sun' will bring hope to the clearing. Sometimes a good clearing does one good. Loved your poem!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Aunt Astri.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I'm terribly afraid this is true with the might of poetic insight. Bummer!

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

from pinnacle to abyss ... this is one amazing dark poem in my opinion ..dark is not usually portrayed in terms so real to one's own life .. in your closing i see my horror of a nursing home waking nightmare .. damn! i feel stun-gunned, actually :{
E.
ps. i like the exercise in "tion" sounding words ..not a detraction ;0

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The reference to 'wounded drummers' leaves images of the regimental drummer, unarmed carrying on marching through the battlefield despite the bullets. Just as many of us do despite the misiles life sends our way. As always a joy to read Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind, insightful review, John.
j.