when the audio is experiencing technical difficulties

when the audio is experiencing technical difficulties


tried to articulate,
but you know us old poets

good at the page,
but tongue-tied and at rage
when the verbalization stagnates
they eyes meet in a stutter

and words seem like foreign objects
flying around as unidentified
mute aliens...

tried to articulate,
but just got a day older
more silent
and less aware of who i used to be
when the words were friendly variables

of an equation i could easily solve.




erin-cilberto
4/10/17

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

I seek my peace with what I've got,
Fingertips fly, but tongue does not!
Ahhhh, there's the rub...
" The eyes meet in a stutter"- home-run line! Love this poetic expression- perfect in all it's parts.

[Mary]

I have not experienced spoken word poetry, but have had the "pleasure " of public speaking at times. Your written words speak volumes!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Mary.
I spent many years doing Blues Poetry with a Clarinetist friend Eric Mandat---he is an amazing musician, and it was always fun performing with him...I would hope soon we get to do it again...he wasn't background music for the poetry, we played off each other.
thanks again,
j.

[Crimson_ish]

I love this poem because it complicates that space between spoken word poetry and written poetry. A difference persists between various forms of enunciation of a poem, and it discusses these elements pretty well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Crimson_ish.
j.

[SM Davis]

when the words were friendly variables of an equation I could easily solve.

BRILLIANT! Oh that the words would be so kind in age as they were in our thoughtful and em-brazened youth

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, SM.
j.

[Pax]

i can relate to this on the bases of my stage fright... it is never easy to overcome that, it takes long process of practice... anyways, i like this piece on which i could relate, my friend, its been long... well done...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Pax.
j.

[Bacchus]

s****y equations of love...
really never add up
only to real, heavenly math
if it is true.

and the hearing should
be lost- within the actions
to be proven

past the words. so easily said.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

insightful words, my friend.

thanks...

j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The reason each generation has trouble understanding each other is each generation is full of different issues.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, true...thank you for your words, Dale.
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you have such a kind face, my friend.

[MsJewel]

I think many will relate to your words Jacob - I know I do. Thoughts flow on paper, even when we become a bit tongue tied. Always a pleasure to read you :) Julie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Julie.
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Though I am no poet and certainly not an old one 😉 still I can relate to this. My audio utters weird noises totally indistinguishable to be counted as normal speech when I really want to voice my feelings.. Something which I have no difficulty in writing over text... Tongue tied is the word alright..
I also think that it's the other way round too. Like those who are good with voicing it aren't as good in writing it down.. Seems like we get one at a time...

That was a nice reflective piece, Jacob. Made me think...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we do seem to get one at a time..don't we?
thank you for your words, Yumna..
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It seems like it..
You're welcome, Jacob 😊

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Sometimes our thoughts and feelings simply cannot be put into words that properly describe what goes on behind our eyes and between our ears ... Time has its way of complicating this reality ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Marv..
j.