a service of sorts

a service of sorts


i put the ashes of us back together
just for an impulsive look at what we were
now, a lasting impression
of what could have been

burns into my heart
like the match we once struck
before the cold fire of regret
set in

and made us only a blue afterglow.


erin-cilberto
4/10/17

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

Novel ideas!
Blue Afterglow.......the wording brings a finality.

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al....appreciate your visit.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Soul-wrenching regret, a deeply felt, heartbroken perspective that would not have existed had what might have been, been. Yet, should the poet's dream be somehow suddenly fulfilled, he would likely eventually discover something else to longingly regret--perhaps, being trapped in a hellish relationship.
The greener grass of another timeline is almost always more mocking mirage than lusher pasture.
Impressive creation, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think your comment is better than the poem Jimmy.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

I think you are much too kind, Jacob.
Your poetry is exceptional.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Jacob, I think regret is the lingering burn, always there. Another incredible poem. Izzy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you again, Izzy....really appreciate your visits.
j.

[Island Hippy]

You're welcome

[maricoona91]

heart break is so painful. It's good that we aren't alone in such experiences..meaning we all go through it it seems...better to have had love and lost it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, thank you for your words, maricoona....
j.

[redzone]

always a bad idea to put those ashes of what was or could have been together again... funny but not humorous, at the way looking back continues to scorch and burn... add my name to the loooong list of those who loved that last line Jacob, that blue afterglow...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Curt...

j.

[Tony Jordan]

A 'smoke alarm' might have prevented this sad demise.
Brilliant imagery Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha..yes, might have...thank you, Tony.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and strong words and thoughts my friend.
The cold fire of regret. Burn our heart and mind forever. Perfect ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[h d e rushin]

my X is visiting me today....Forewarned, I plan on being long gone from this house....Perhaps take in a bad movie or go to the mall like a 17 year old...Yikes..We are the "blue afterglow" you write about here jacob........something that use to be red hot in any situation.....anywhere....

Great poem my friend....dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, my friend....enjoy the mall...and maybe sneak a cigarette or two while you are there.
read morethank you, my friend....enjoy the mall...and maybe sneak a cigarette or two while you are there.
:)))

j.

[Ken Simm.]

Possibly a truer meaning of heartburn. Not antacids we can take for this however. Remarkable as always Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ken,
j.

[Paul Bell]

If only we could regret, before the final regret. It might all have been different. Suppose that's why they sell matches.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, hindsight is...well we know...thank you, Paul.
j.